Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and reduce hesitation fillers such as “uh,” which are used too frequently. The phrase “like every child in neighborhood” should be corrected to “like almost every child in my neighborhood.” Avoid repetition in “I remember it” after already saying that it was a great time. Add one specific detail, such as where you rode your bike or what you enjoyed doing, to make the answer more vivid and effective.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a couple of bikes when I was a child, and I often rode them around my neighborhood with my friends. I especially enjoyed cycling to the park on weekends because it was a fun way to spend time outdoors.

제안: Give a clearer topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are still quite popular, although electric bikes are becoming more common.” Correct “the condition is a bit different” to “the situation is a bit different,” and avoid repeating “electric.” The phrase “they don’t like bike” should be changed to “people are less interested in traditional bicycles.” Use a linking word such as “however” to contrast ordinary bicycles with electric bikes, and include a specific reason, such as convenience for commuting or traveling uphill.

예시: Yes, bikes are still quite popular in my country, although the situation is changing. Many people now prefer electric bikes because they are more convenient for commuting and require less effort, especially on hills. However, traditional bicycles are still common among children and people who enjoy exercising.

× I did like, uh, every child in, uh, neighborhood.

✓ I did, like every child in the neighborhood.

The noun neighborhood refers to a specific neighborhood in this context, so it needs the definite article the. The phrase should be in the neighborhood.

× But nowadays, a condition a bit different.

✓ But nowadays, the situation is a bit different.

The original sentence does not contain a main verb. The linking verb is is needed to connect the subject the situation with the adjective phrase a bit different.

× Because most people have uh electric electric bike.

✓ Because most people have electric bikes.

The repeated word electric should be used only once. Since the sentence refers to electric bikes in general, the plural form bikes is more natural and does not require an article.

× They don't like uh bike, yeah, traditional or old bikes.

✓ They do not like traditional or old bikes.

When speaking about bikes in general, use the plural noun bikes rather than the singular noun bike. The corrected sentence also removes the unnecessary filler and repetition.