Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating or correcting yourself several times. Use the past tense consistently because the question refers to your childhood: say “I had a bike,” not “I have a bike.” The phrases “whenever we worth a try,” “in the child,” and “a lot of bike” are unclear or grammatically incorrect. Give one or two specific details, such as what the bike looked like, where you rode it, or how often you used it. Keep the answer to two or three connected sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small blue bike, and I rode it around my neighborhood after school. I eventually got a new one when I grew taller.

제안: Start with a clear answer, but avoid making an unsupported absolute claim such as “every household.” Explain which groups use bikes and why. The phrases “especially for people,” “countryside,” and “Not a modem or on the CDs” are incomplete or unclear; use precise expressions such as “people in rural areas” and “as a convenient and inexpensive means of transport.” Add a linking word such as “because” or “although” and provide a specific comparison between rural and urban areas.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in rural areas and smaller towns. People often use them because they are affordable and convenient for short journeys. However, in large cities, many people prefer buses or motorbikes because the roads are busy.

× Yeah, of course everyone has a bike whenever we worth a try, especially for me, I'm an example really especially that in the child I have a lot of bike, but every year I I buy a new I bought, I bought a new one, but.

✓ Yeah, of course. Everyone had a bike when they were children. In my case, I had several bikes because I bought a new one every year.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should mainly use the past tense. Use had instead of has, were instead of are or an incorrect form of be, and bought instead of buy. Avoid repeating different forms of the same verb, such as buy and bought.

× I have a lot of bike.

✓ I had a lot of bikes.

The quantifier a lot of refers to more than one bike in this context, so the plural noun bikes is required. The verb had is also appropriate because the student is describing childhood.

× Especially that in the child I have a lot of bike.

✓ Especially when I was a child, I had a lot of bikes.

The phrase in the child is not used to refer to a period of someone's life. Use when I was a child. This phrase correctly expresses the time when the student owned the bikes.

× Yeah, of course everyone has a bike whenever we worth a try, especially for me, I'm an example really especially that in the child I have a lot of bike, but every year I I buy a new I bought, I bought a new one, but.

✓ Yeah, of course. Everyone had a bike when they were children. In my case, I had several bikes because I bought a new one every year.

The original answer is a run-on sentence containing incomplete and repeated clauses. Separate the ideas into complete sentences, use a clear subject and verb in each sentence, and connect the ideas with because to show the reason.

× Yes, every household has a bike, especially for people. Uh, countryside.

✓ Yes, every household has a bike, especially among people in the countryside.

Use among people to describe a group in which something is common. Use in the countryside to indicate where those people live. The original preposition for does not express this meaning correctly.

× Uh, countryside.

✓ They are especially popular among people in the countryside.

Countryside is only a noun phrase and does not form a complete sentence because it has no subject and verb. Add the subject they and the verb are to create a complete sentence.

× Not a modem or on the CDs.

✓ They are not as popular in modern cities.

The original phrase is incomplete and does not contain a complete subject-verb structure. Use they are to form a complete sentence. The preposition in is appropriate for referring to a location such as cities.