Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, ‘buy’는 ‘bike’로 수정해야 하며 ‘in my the in my childhood’, ‘I was very outgoing child’, ‘play with children with ride a bike’와 같은 표현은 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 먼저 ‘Yes, I did’ 또는 ‘Yes, I had a bike’로 주제를 명확히 제시한 뒤, 자전거를 탄 이유와 부모님이 사 주신 결과를 연결어로 자연스럽게 설명하세요. ‘a very outgoing child’처럼 관사를 사용하고, ‘wanted to ride a bike with my friends’처럼 정확한 동사 구조를 사용해야 합니다. 마지막의 ‘that’s all’은 불필요하므로 구체적인 한 가지 세부 정보로 답변을 마무리하는 것이 좋습니다.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child because I was very outgoing and loved playing outside with my friends. As a result, my parents bought me a bike so that I could ride around the neighborhood with them.

제안: ‘bike’는 일반적인 의미이므로 ‘bikes’ 또는 ‘riding bikes’라고 해야 하며, ‘writing a bike’는 ‘riding a bike’로 수정해야 합니다. 또한 ‘this day’와 ‘especially this day they are’는 의미가 불분명하고 반복적이므로 삭제하거나 구체적인 현재 상황으로 바꾸세요. ‘Yes, they are popular, especially among children and teenagers’처럼 직접적인 주제문으로 시작하고, 그 이유나 관찰한 결과를 ‘because’ 또는 ‘for example’로 연결하면 답변이 더 논리적입니다. 국가 전체에 대한 질문이므로 남자아이들만 언급하기보다 어린이와 청소년, 출퇴근이나 여가 활동 등 더 일반적인 대상을 포함하는 것이 좋습니다.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and teenagers. Many people ride them for exercise or to travel short distances because they are convenient and inexpensive. However, cycling is more common for leisure than for commuting in large cities.

× Yes, I had a buy when I was a child in my the in my childhood.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The phrase in my the in my childhood is grammatically disorganized and repeats the same time expression. Use one clear time expression, such as when I was a child. The word buy appears to be a spelling or word-choice error, not a grammar error; the correct word is bike.

× I was very outgoing child.

✓ I was a very outgoing child.

A singular countable noun such as child needs an article. Use a before very outgoing child because the speaker is describing one child.

× So I want to play with children.

✓ So I wanted to play with other children.

The question asks about the speaker's childhood, so the past tense is required. Change want to wanted to describe a past desire.

× with ride a bike

✓ and ride a bike

The phrase with ride a bike cannot correctly connect the two activities. Use and to connect the two parallel verb phrases: play with other children and ride a bike.

× My parents bought me for a bike.

✓ My parents bought me a bike.

The verb buy can take a person and a thing directly: buy someone something. The preposition for is not used between me and a bike in this structure.

× I think bike is very popular in my country.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in my country.

When speaking about bicycles in general, use the plural noun bikes. The plural subject bikes also requires the plural verb are.

× I can't see many boys writing a bike.

✓ I do not see many boys riding bikes.

After many, a plural noun is appropriate when referring to bicycles in general, so use bikes instead of a bike. The natural verb for using a bicycle is riding, not writing.

× especially this day

✓ especially these days

These days is the correct adverbial expression for referring to the present period. This day refers to one particular day and does not express the intended general meaning.

× especially this day they are.

✓ These days, many boys are not interested in riding bikes.

The original clause is incomplete because are has no necessary complement and the meaning is unfinished. Add a complete subject, verb, and complement to form a complete sentence.