Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ передаёт основную идею и содержит личные детали, но есть несколько грамматических ошибок и неестественных формулировок. Используйте конструкцию “I didn’t have a bike” вместо “I didn’t have”, а для прошлого — “my brother had one”, а не “my brother have had”. Фраза “my friends also they had” содержит лишнее местоимение; лучше сказать “some of my friends had bikes too”. Логика в конце неясна: вместо “Then I took my brother’s bike” объясните, что вы иногда брали велосипед брата, чтобы потренироваться. Ответ можно сделать более связным с помощью “However”, “so” и “although” и ограничить его 3–4 чёткими предложениями.

예시: No, unfortunately, I didn’t have a bike of my own when I was a child. However, my older brother had one, and he taught me how to ride it. Some of my friends had bikes too, so I sometimes borrowed my brother’s bike to ride with them.

제안: Ответ начинается с чёткой позиции, но дальнейшее объяснение трудно понять из-за нарушенной грамматики и структуры. Вместо “I don’t think like that” используйте естественную фразу “I don’t think they are very popular”. Для сравнения примените связку “whereas” или “while”: “Cars are much more popular, whereas bicycles are mainly used by children.” Нужно ясно объяснить возрастные различия: дети могут кататься для развлечения, а пожилые люди — для здоровья или отдыха. Исправьте формы и порядок слов: “when people get older” вместо “when they get retired or get old” и “they don’t usually own a bike” вместо “people weren’t their child own a bike”.

예시: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Cars are the main form of transport, especially for commuting and travelling long distances. Children often ride bikes for fun, whereas older people may use them for exercise or relaxation.

× No, unfortunately I didn't have

✓ No, unfortunately, I didn't have one.

The verb have needs an object in this sentence. The pronoun one refers to a bike and prevents the sentence from being incomplete.

× my brother have had

✓ my brother had one

The answer describes a past situation, so the past simple form had is needed. Have had is present perfect and does not fit this past-time context.

× my friends also they had

✓ my friends also had bikes

The noun phrase my friends already functions as the subject, so the pronoun they is redundant. Also, the object bikes is needed after had.

× but I grew up. Then I took my brother's bike.

✓ As I grew up, I took my brother's bike.

But expresses contrast, but there is no clear contrast between the two ideas. As creates a logical time relationship between growing up and taking the bike.

× Driving a car is really popular in my home country but riding a bike is when they were a child people weren't their child own a bike and when they get retired or get old, sometimes people ride a bike.

✓ Driving a car is really popular in my home country, but riding a bike is not. When people were children, they did not own bikes, but when they retire or get old, they sometimes ride bikes.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined without a clear structure. Separate the main ideas into two sentences and place the time clauses before or after the main clauses in a logical order.

× when they were a child ... their child ... a bike

✓ When they were children, they did not own bikes.

They refers to more than one person, so child should be children. The plural noun bikes is appropriate when speaking generally about bicycles.

× people weren't ... own a bike

✓ people did not own bikes

Own is a main verb, so its negative past form is did not own, not were not own. The past simple is required because the sentence refers to the time when they were children.

× when they get retired

✓ when they retire

Retire is normally used as an intransitive verb when people choose or reach the stage of stopping work. The passive-like form get retired is not appropriate in this context.

× when they get retired or get old, sometimes people ride a bike

✓ when they retire or get old, they sometimes ride bikes

This sentence describes a general situation, so the present simple is appropriate: retire, get, and ride. The subject they should also be placed before the main verb, and the plural noun bikes is more natural for a general statement.