Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly and use more natural grammar: say “I had a pink bike” instead of “I had a bike which was pink color.” Improve word choice and sentence structure by using “At first,” “because I didn’t know how to ride it properly,” and “on the street.” Your answer has a clear sequence and a personal reaction, but it would be more effective with accurate prepositions and fewer awkward phrases.

예시: Yes, I had a pink bike when I was a child. At first, I practised riding it at home because I didn’t know how to ride it properly. After a few weeks, I was confident enough to ride it on the street, which was really exciting.

제안: Give a complete and organized answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons. Avoid repeating “because,” the unfinished phrase “let’s move to the second reason,” and the incorrect expression “most of children”; say “most children.” Also, use the plural subject correctly: “bikes are popular,” and explain that people of different ages ride them if you want to add a second point.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many children ride them in their neighbourhoods for fun and exercise. In addition, adults often use bicycles to commute because they are affordable and environmentally friendly.

× When I was a child I had a bike which was pink color at the first I tried to ride it at home because I didn't know how to ride it probably.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike which was pink. At first, I tried to ride it at home because I didn't know how to ride it properly.

The phrase was pink color is incorrect because color is being used as a noun without an article. The natural expression is was pink, using pink as an adjective. Use a comma or a full stop to separate the two complete ideas.

× When I was a child I had a bike which was pink color at the first I tried to ride it at home because I didn't know how to ride it probably.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike which was pink. At first, I tried to ride it at home because I didn't know how to ride it properly.

The fixed expression is at first, not at the first. At first means in the beginning. Remember this expression as a complete phrase.

× When I was a child I had a bike which was pink color at the first I tried to ride it at home because I didn't know how to ride it probably.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike which was pink. At first, I tried to ride it at home because I didn't know how to ride it properly.

Probably means likely, but the intended meaning is in the correct way. The correct adverb is properly. Use properly when describing how an action is performed.

× After a few weeks I rode it in a street.

✓ After a few weeks, I rode it on the street.

The usual preposition for riding a bicycle on a road or street is on, not in. Use on the street, on the road, or on a bike path.

× Yes actually it is popular in my country because Because most of children in my neighbourhood like to ride a bike let's move to the second reason which is also not only young

✓ Yes, actually, bikes are popular in my country because most children in my neighborhood like to ride bikes. Let's move to the second reason, which is that people of all ages, not only young people, like to ride bikes.

The noun bikes is plural, so it must be replaced by the plural pronoun they, or the sentence can repeat bikes. The singular pronoun it does not agree with the plural noun bikes. Make sure pronouns agree with the nouns they refer to in number.

× Yes actually it is popular in my country because Because most of children in my neighbourhood like to ride a bike let's move to the second reason which is also not only young

✓ Yes, actually, bikes are popular in my country because most children in my neighborhood like to ride bikes. Let's move to the second reason, which is that people of all ages, not only young people, like to ride bikes.

Because is repeated unnecessarily. Use the conjunction only once: because most children. Check for repeated linking words when speaking, especially when you restart or extend an answer.

× Yes actually it is popular in my country because Because most of children in my neighbourhood like to ride a bike let's move to the second reason which is also not only young

✓ Yes, actually, bikes are popular in my country because most children in my neighborhood like to ride bikes. Let's move to the second reason, which is that people of all ages, not only young people, like to ride bikes.

Most is used directly before a plural countable noun when speaking generally: most children. Do not use of before the noun in this structure. Use most of the children when referring to a specific group.

× Yes actually it is popular in my country because Because most of children in my neighbourhood like to ride a bike let's move to the second reason which is also not only young

✓ Yes, actually, bikes are popular in my country because most children in my neighborhood like to ride bikes. Let's move to the second reason, which is that people of all ages, not only young people, like to ride bikes.

The original answer contains several ideas joined together without clear sentence boundaries, and the phrase which is also not only young is incomplete. Separate the ideas into complete sentences and use a parallel structure: not only young people, but people of all ages.