Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 질문에 직접 답하기 위해 먼저 “No, I didn’t”라고 시작하는 것이 좋습니다. “play a bicycle”은 자연스럽지 않으므로 “ride a bicycle” 또는 “learn to ride a bike”를 사용하세요. 또한 “but”와 “however”는 함께 쓰지 말고 하나만 사용해야 하며, 과거의 경험이므로 “I haven’t had”보다 “I didn’t have” 또는 “I never had”가 적절합니다. 가족이 바빴다는 이유와 그 결과를 연결어로 간결하게 설명하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

예시: No, I didn’t. I wanted to learn how to ride a bike, but my family members were too busy to teach me. As a result, I never had the chance to ride one when I was a child.

제안: “I was born in South Korea”는 질문에 대한 답과 직접적인 관련이 없으므로 삭제하고, “Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in South Korea”처럼 바로 의견을 제시하세요. “bicycle is famous”보다 “bikes are popular”가 자연스럽고, “park which is which is available for”는 문장이 완성되지 않았으므로 “well-maintained parks and dedicated bike paths”처럼 구체적인 명사를 사용해야 합니다. 공원, 자전거 도로, 출퇴근이나 여가 활동 등의 구체적인 예를 하나 덧붙이면 답변의 내용과 어휘가 향상됩니다.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in South Korea. Many cities have well-maintained parks and dedicated bike paths, so people often ride bicycles for exercise or leisure. Cycling is especially common on weekends.

× When I was young I wanted to play a bicycle, but however, I had no one in my family who was able to teach my biking skills because they were busy, so I haven't had a chance to bike when I was a child.

✓ When I was young, I wanted to play a bicycle, but I had no one in my family who was able to teach me biking skills because they were busy, so I didn't have a chance to bike when I was a child.

The phrase refers to a completed period in the past, indicated by when I was a child. Therefore, use the simple past didn't have instead of the present perfect haven't had. The present perfect is generally used for past events connected to the present, not for a finished past time.

× When I was young I wanted to play a bicycle, but however, I had no one in my family who was able to teach my biking skills because they were busy, so I haven't had a chance to bike when I was a child.

✓ When I was young, I wanted to play a bicycle, but I had no one in my family who was able to teach me biking skills because they were busy, so I didn't have a chance to bike when I was a child.

After teach, the person receiving the instruction should be the object pronoun me, not the possessive determiner my. Use teach me biking skills or teach me how to ride a bicycle.

× When I was young I wanted to play a bicycle, but however, I had no one in my family who was able to teach my biking skills because they were busy, so I haven't had a chance to bike when I was a child.

✓ When I was young, I wanted to play a bicycle, but I had no one in my family who was able to teach me biking skills because they were busy, so I didn't have a chance to bike when I was a child.

But and however have a similar contrasting meaning, so using both together is redundant. Use either but or however. In this sentence, but fits naturally because it joins two contrasting clauses.

× I was born in South Korea and I'm not sure but I think bicycle is famous in our country because we have a well made park which is which is available for.

✓ I was born in South Korea, and I'm not sure, but I think bicycles are popular in our country because we have well-made parks that are available for cycling.

When speaking about bicycles in general, use the plural noun bicycles. The plural subject requires the plural verb are. Also, parks is plural because the sentence describes parks in general.

× I was born in South Korea and I'm not sure but I think bicycle is famous in our country because we have a well made park which is which is available for.

✓ I was born in South Korea, and I'm not sure, but I think bicycles are popular in our country because we have well-made parks that are available for cycling.

The subject bicycles is plural, so the verb must be are, not is. Subject and verb must agree in number.

× I was born in South Korea and I'm not sure but I think bicycle is famous in our country because we have a well made park which is which is available for.

✓ I was born in South Korea, and I'm not sure, but I think bicycles are popular in our country because we have well-made parks that are available for cycling.

A singular countable noun normally needs an article, but when referring to bicycles in general, the plural form bicycles is more natural and does not need an article. If referring to one specific bicycle, say a bicycle or the bicycle.

× I was born in South Korea and I'm not sure but I think bicycle is famous in our country because we have a well made park which is which is available for.

✓ I was born in South Korea, and I'm not sure, but I think bicycles are popular in our country because we have well-made parks that are available for cycling.

The phrase which is which is repeats the relative clause, and available for is incomplete because it needs an object or activity. Use a single relative clause, such as that are available for cycling, to create a complete and clear sentence.