Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ в целом понятен и содержит прямой ответ и причину, однако есть заметные ошибки в выборе слов и грамматике: “boy” нужно заменить на “bike”, а “I didn't have a bike because...” звучит естественнее, чем “I didn't have a boy”. Избегайте повторения “when I was a child” и используйте более естественную конструкцию “I really wanted one”. Для улучшения структуры начните с краткого прямого ответа, затем добавьте причину и личную деталь.

예시: Unfortunately, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. However, I really wanted one, as I thought it would be exciting to ride around my neighborhood with my friends.

제안: Ответ содержит мнение и причину, но большое количество пауз и незаконченных фраз (“Earn”, “or require”, “better to happen”) значительно снижает естественность и ясность. Сформулируйте позицию прямо: “I don’t think bikes are very popular”. Затем логично объясните причину с помощью “because” или “as a result”. Исправьте лексику и грамматику: “the weather is often cold and unpredictable”, “it is more convenient to use a car”. Также избегайте повторения “’cause” и ограничьтесь двумя-тремя связанными предложениями.

예시: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. The weather is often cold and unpredictable, so cycling can be uncomfortable for much of the year. As a result, many people prefer using cars, especially for commuting.

× I guess not really 'cause or require so much more popular in our country.

✓ I guess bikes are not really that popular in our country.

The sentence needs a clear subject, bikes, and the verb be must agree with this plural subject: bikes are. Use are not popular to form the negative statement correctly.

× We have kind of very cold weather and very unpredictable.

✓ We have very cold and unpredictable weather.

The original sentence incorrectly combines the noun weather with the adjective unpredictable. Both adjectives should modify weather directly, so the correct structure is very cold and unpredictable weather.

× It's better to happen to use the car.

✓ It is more convenient to use a car.

The phrase happen to use does not express the intended meaning. When referring to a car in general, use the indefinite article a rather than the. The phrase more convenient clearly explains why using a car is preferable.