Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant, clear, and well developed, with specific details about the basket, the birthday gift, and riding around the neighborhood. However, avoid repeating “the bike,” and use the more natural expression “my parents gave it to me as a birthday present” instead of the awkward passive structure “the bike was given as a present.” Also, “it did make me very happy” sounds unnecessarily emphatic; “which made me very happy” is more natural. You could improve the flow by combining the ideas with a linking word such as “because” or “so.”

예시: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a beautiful bike with a small front basket as a birthday present. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school, which was a lot of fun and made me feel independent.

제안: You answer the question directly and provide a comparison with the Netherlands, as well as a reason and an alternative form of transport. However, “for smaller commute” should be “for short commutes,” and “not as famous as Netherlands” should be “not as popular as they are in the Netherlands.” The phrase “because given the road situation and traffic” is grammatically incomplete; use “because of the poor road conditions and heavy traffic.” Also, “public transport” is generally uncountable, and the ideas would be clearer if you used a linking word such as “however” or “as a result.”

예시: Bikes are fairly common in India, especially for short commutes, but they are not as popular as they are in the Netherlands. This is mainly because many Indian cities have heavy traffic and poor road conditions. As a result, people often prefer walking or using public transport.

× Bikes are quite common in India for smaller commute, not as famous as Netherlands though because given the road situation and traffic.

✓ Bikes are quite common in India for shorter commutes, although they are not as popular as they are in the Netherlands, given the road conditions and traffic.

Commute is a countable noun in this context, so it should be plural when referring to commuting in general: shorter commutes. Also, shorter is the natural adjective for describing the duration or distance of a commute; smaller is not normally used with commute.

× Bikes are quite common in India for smaller commute, not as famous as Netherlands though because given the road situation and traffic.

✓ Bikes are quite common in India for shorter commutes, although they are not as popular as they are in the Netherlands, given the road conditions and traffic.

The country name Netherlands requires the definite article the. The correct form is the Netherlands.

× Bikes are quite common in India for smaller commute, not as famous as Netherlands though because given the road situation and traffic.

✓ Bikes are quite common in India for shorter commutes, although they are not as popular as they are in the Netherlands, given the road conditions and traffic.

The phrase not as famous as Netherlands though because given the road situation and traffic is structurally incomplete and difficult to follow. Use although to introduce the contrast and given the road conditions and traffic to provide the reason clearly. A complete comparison is they are not as popular as they are in the Netherlands.

× People tend to walk or use public transports rather than bikes.

✓ People tend to walk or use public transport rather than bikes.

Public transport is generally an uncountable noun when referring to transportation services in general, so it is not normally pluralized as public transports.