Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly and use natural expressions. “Any various motorcycle” is incorrect and unnatural; say “a motorcycle” or “any other type of bike.” Also, “when I was a child” is more natural than “in my childhood.” Add a brief reason or detail to make the answer more developed.

예시: No, unfortunately, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents thought it was unsafe for me to ride on the busy roads in my neighborhood, so I usually walked or took the bus instead.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating “also,” “place,” and “popular.” Use “most men and women” rather than “most of men or women,” and say “travel from one place to another.” Distinguish between bicycles and motorcycles, and give one specific reason or example to support your opinion. Keep the response to two or three well-connected sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use bicycles or motorcycles to travel from one place to another because they are affordable and convenient, especially in crowded cities. Cycling is also becoming more popular as a form of exercise.

× Unfortunately, I didn't have a bike or any various motorcycle in my childhood.

✓ Unfortunately, I didn't have a bike or any motorcycles during my childhood.

The noun motorcycle follows the quantifier any, so it should be plural: motorcycles. Use the plural form when referring to motorcycles in general or to an unspecified number of them.

× Unfortunately, I didn't have a bike or any various motorcycle in my childhood.

✓ Unfortunately, I didn't have a bike or any motorcycles during my childhood.

Any and various should not be used together in this expression. Use any motorcycles to mean an unspecified number of motorcycles. Also, during my childhood is more natural than in my childhood in this context.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because Also most of men or women use bicycles to go another place to place to place or another place.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because most men and women use bicycles to go from place to place.

Use most men and women for people in general. The phrase most of the men and women would refer to a specific group. The original phrase most of men or women uses the quantifier and conjunction incorrectly.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because Also most of men or women use bicycles to go another place to place to place or another place.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because most men and women use bicycles to go from place to place.

Also cannot be placed directly after because in this sentence. In addition, use and instead of or because the intended meaning includes both men and women, not one group or the other.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because Also most of men or women use bicycles to go another place to place to place or another place.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because most men and women use bicycles to go from place to place.

The correct preposition pattern is go from place to place. From shows the starting point, and to shows the destination or movement between places.

× Also there are various kinds of bikes, motorcycles and some rides even just cycle which is very good and it's very popular.

✓ Also, there are various kinds of bikes and motorcycles, and some people even just cycle, which is very good and very popular.

The original sentence combines several ideas without a clear structure. Use and to connect the types of vehicles, and add some people as the subject of cycle. The final adjective phrase can be shortened to very good and very popular because the repeated pronoun it is unnecessary.