Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the examiner's question directly instead of repeating it. Start with a clear yes-or-no response, then add one or two specific details, such as when you got the bike, who gave it to you, or how you used it. Avoid copying the question because it does not provide any relevant information.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was about eight years old, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends. It was a great way to have fun and stay active.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence first, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Then support your opinion with specific and logically linked details. Replace unnatural phrases such as “especially in this year” with “especially this year,” “write them” with “ride them,” and “with application” with “using an app.” Reduce fillers such as “umm” and “uh,” and use linking words like “for example” and “in addition” to make your answer more fluent and coherent.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially this year. Many people ride them in parks, and some public bikes can be rented using a mobile app. In addition, several new cycling routes have been built, so cycling has become more convenient and enjoyable.

× Actually, yes, umm, especially in this year, there are many bicycles, umm, in the parks and that people can uh, write them, uh, with application, uh, and also this year, uh, there are many uh, new routes for bicycle.

✓ Actually, yes, especially this year, there are many bicycles in the parks that people can ride using an application, and there are also many new routes for bicycles.

The preposition in is not used before the expression this year. Say especially this year, not especially in this year. The expression this year already functions as a time expression without a preposition.

× Actually, yes, umm, especially in this year, there are many bicycles, umm, in the parks and that people can uh, write them, uh, with application, uh, and also this year, uh, there are many uh, new routes for bicycle.

✓ Actually, yes, especially this year, there are many bicycles in the parks that people can ride using an application, and there are also many new routes for bicycles.

Application is a singular countable noun, so it needs a determiner. Use an application or, more naturally, an app. The article an is used because application begins with a vowel sound.

× Actually, yes, umm, especially in this year, there are many bicycles, umm, in the parks and that people can uh, write them, uh, with application, uh, and also this year, uh, there are many uh, new routes for bicycle.

✓ Actually, yes, especially this year, there are many bicycles in the parks that people can ride using an application, and there are also many new routes for bicycles.

The noun bicycle should be plural because the sentence refers to routes intended for bicycles in general. Use routes for bicycles, not routes for bicycle.