Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct and logically consistent answer. Your response contradicts itself because you first say that you did not have a bike and then mention that you received one at the age of ten. Clarify the time sequence by saying that you did not own a bike before the age of ten. Also, say “a bike” rather than “any bike,” “a bicycle gifted by my father,” and “I was really surprised.” Use a linking word such as “however” to connect the contrasting ideas naturally.

예시: I didn’t have a bike when I was very young. However, my father gave me one for my tenth birthday, which was a wonderful surprise. I enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood and often used it to visit my friends.

제안: Answer the question directly by saying whether bikes are popular and then explain why. The phrases “a young generation emotion” and “my emotions behind it” are unclear and unnatural; replace them with specific reasons such as affordability, convenience, exercise, or environmental concerns. Avoid repeating “emotion” and connect your ideas with a clear linking word, such as “because,” “in addition,” or “as a result.” Use plural nouns and articles correctly, for example, “bikes are popular among young people.”

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. They are affordable and convenient for short trips, and many people also ride them for exercise. In addition, cycling is becoming more popular because it is an environmentally friendly way to travel.

× No, I didn't have any bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

Bike is a singular countable noun, so it normally needs an article. Use a bike when referring to one bike in a general statement.

× However, I had a bicycle gifted my father on my tenth birthday and I was really surprised about that.

✓ However, I had a bicycle gifted by my father on my tenth birthday, and I was really surprised about that.

The preposition by is required to show who gave or presented the bicycle. Use gifted by my father, not gifted my father.

× Yeah, bikes are more popular in my country because bike is a young generation emotion and it's also my emotions behind it therefore there are many young people.

✓ Yeah, bikes are more popular in my country because bikes are popular among the younger generation, and many young people ride them.

When speaking about bikes in general, use the plural noun bikes rather than the singular noun bike. The plural form also agrees with the verb are.

× Yeah, bikes are more popular in my country because bike is a young generation emotion and it's also my emotions behind it therefore there are many young people.

✓ Yeah, bikes are more popular in my country because they are popular among the younger generation, and many young people ride them.

Use among to describe popularity within a group, such as the younger generation. The phrase popular among the younger generation is more grammatically appropriate than a young generation emotion.

× Yeah, bikes are more popular in my country because bike is a young generation emotion and it's also my emotions behind it therefore there are many young people.

✓ Yeah, bikes are more popular in my country because they are popular among the younger generation, and many young people ride them.

The pronouns it and my emotions do not clearly or correctly refer to bikes. Use they for bikes and them after the verb ride. Clear pronoun references make the sentence easier to understand.

× Yeah, bikes are more popular in my country because bike is a young generation emotion and it's also my emotions behind it therefore there are many young people.

✓ Yeah, bikes are more popular in my country because they are popular among the younger generation, and many young people ride them.

The original sentence joins several incomplete and unclear ideas without a clear structure. Organize the answer into a main clause and a because clause, then connect the final idea with and. This creates a complete and logically structured sentence.