Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly, then add one or two specific details. Avoid repeating words such as “my” and “for my,” and use accurate past-tense forms: “gave it to me” instead of “was giving me,” and “rode” instead of “ride.” You should also explain why the bicycle was special and connect your ideas with a linking word such as “because.”

예시: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a black bicycle for my birthday when I was in Grade 7. It was very special because it was my first bike, and I often rode it around my neighborhood after school.

제안: Give a clear opinion at the beginning and avoid contradictory statements such as saying bikes are both popular and not popular. Use a natural phrase like “not particularly popular,” and explain who uses bikes and why. Replace unclear expressions such as “around is of small in during childhood” with precise language, and use linking words to make the answer coherent.

예시: Not particularly. Bikes are mainly popular among young children, who use them for fun or to play with their friends. However, most teenagers and adults in my country prefer cars or public transportation, so cycling is not very common overall.

× I had a black bicycle which my parents bought me for my for my birthday as a present and it was giving me when I was in grade 7 and it was so special for me.

✓ I had a black bicycle that my parents bought for me for my birthday. It was given to me when I was in Grade 7, and it was very special to me.

The phrase “it was giving me” uses an active progressive form incorrectly. Because the bicycle received the action, the passive form “it was given to me” is needed. Also, use “bought for me” when someone purchases something for another person.

× It was so special for me.

✓ It was very special to me.

The usual preposition after “special” when describing emotional importance is “to,” not “for.” The phrase “special to me” means that the bicycle had personal importance.

× I ride bicycle.

✓ I rode a bicycle.

The question asks about the speaker’s childhood, so the past tense is required. The past form of “ride” is irregular: “ride” becomes “rode.”

× I ride bicycle.

✓ I rode a bicycle.

A singular countable noun such as “bicycle” needs a determiner. Use the indefinite article “a” when referring to one nonspecific bicycle.

× Not really, bikes are popular among children around is of small in during childhood.

✓ Not really. Bikes are popular among children, especially during childhood.

The original sentence contains an incomplete and disorganized group of words: “around is of small in during childhood.” A complete sentence needs a clear subject, verb, and logically ordered information. “Especially during childhood” is a correct phrase for adding emphasis.

× And yes it's not that much popular in my country.

✓ However, bikes are not that popular in my country.

The pronoun “it” is singular, but “bikes” is plural. Use the plural pronoun “they,” or repeat the noun “bikes.” The correction repeats the noun to make the reference clear.

× It's not that much popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are not that popular in my country.

“Popular” is an adjective, so it should be modified by “that” in this structure. The phrase “that much popular” is unnatural here. Say “not that popular” instead.