Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is direct and includes a specific personal detail and feeling. However, “fascinating bike” sounds unnatural in this context; “lovely” or “special” would be more appropriate. Also, “it did get lost” is unnecessarily emphatic, so use “it was lost” or “I lost it.” Add a linking word such as “Unfortunately” to make the contrast clearer.

예시: Yes, I had a lovely bike when I was a child. Unfortunately, I lost it on my ninth birthday, which made me feel really disappointed because I had been very attached to it.

제안: You express your opinion and provide a relevant observation, but there are several grammatical and word-choice problems. Say “bikes are very popular,” not “bikes have very popular,” and use “ride bikes” rather than “drive bikes.” “Gender-neutral” is not suitable here; say “people of all genders ride them.” The answer is also one long sentence, so use linking words and shorter sentences to improve clarity. Avoid focusing only on women riders unless it directly supports your main answer.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people and commuters. People of all genders ride them, and many use bikes because they are affordable and convenient. I do not ride one myself, though, because I have never learned how to cycle.

× Yes, bikes have very popular in my country and the most beautiful thing about it is that it is not general neutral and both women and men drive bikes and I find it very cool when women drive bike even though I do not know how to drive one.

✓ Yes, bikes have been very popular in my country, and the most beautiful thing about them is that they are gender-neutral. Both women and men ride bikes, and I find it very cool when women ride bikes, even though I do not know how to ride one.

The present perfect structure requires have or has + the past participle. The verb be must therefore appear as been: have been popular, not have popular.

× Yes, bikes have very popular in my country and the most beautiful thing about it is that it is not general neutral and both women and men drive bikes and I find it very cool when women drive bike even though I do not know how to drive one.

✓ Yes, bikes have been very popular in my country, and the most beautiful thing about them is that they are gender-neutral. Both women and men ride bikes, and I find it very cool when women ride bikes, even though I do not know how to ride one.

The noun bikes is plural, so it should be replaced by the plural pronoun them, not the singular pronoun it. Likewise, they is needed instead of it when referring back to bikes.

× Yes, bikes have very popular in my country and the most beautiful thing about it is that it is not general neutral and both women and men drive bikes and I find it very cool when women drive bike even though I do not know how to drive one.

✓ Yes, bikes have been very popular in my country, and the most beautiful thing about them is that they are gender-neutral. Both women and men ride bikes, and I find it very cool when women ride bikes, even though I do not know how to ride one.

General neutral is not the correct adjective expression in this context. Gender-neutral means not limited to or associated with a particular gender.

× Yes, bikes have very popular in my country and the most beautiful thing about it is that it is not general neutral and both women and men drive bikes and I find it very cool when women drive bike even though I do not know how to drive one.

✓ Yes, bikes have been very popular in my country, and the most beautiful thing about them is that they are gender-neutral. Both women and men ride bikes, and I find it very cool when women ride bikes, even though I do not know how to ride one.

When speaking about bikes in general, use the plural noun bikes rather than the singular countable noun bike without an article. Also, ride one is more natural when referring to riding a bike.