Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly and use a clearer sentence structure. Avoid the hesitation and repetition in “it was with it was.” Add one specific detail about how or where you used the bike, and use linking words such as “because” or “so” to connect your ideas.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was red with flowers on it, and it was my first bike. I loved it because I rode it around my neighborhood with my friends after school.

제안: Give a complete answer with a clear topic sentence and finish your idea. Explain where people ride bikes and why cycling is popular. Use linking words such as “especially,” “because,” and “for example,” and avoid stopping at an incomplete phrase like “we have special.”

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large parks and residential areas. Many people ride them for exercise, relaxation, or short trips. In addition, some cities have special bicycle lanes, which make cycling safer and more convenient.

× Yes I had a bike it was with it was red with some flowers on it and it was my first and best bike ever.

✓ Yes, I had a bike. It was red with some flowers on it, and it was my first and best bike ever.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined together incorrectly, and the phrase it was with it was red is not grammatically meaningful. Separate the ideas into two sentences and remove the unnecessary with it was. Use a full stop between independent clauses to make the sentence structure clear.

× Yes bikes are popular in my country in parks there are a lot of people who ride bikes And we have special

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country. In parks, there are a lot of people who ride bikes, and we have special bicycle lanes.

The original response joins several independent clauses without appropriate sentence boundaries. In addition, the final clause, we have special, is incomplete because it needs a noun after special. Divide the response into clear sentences and complete the final idea with a suitable noun, such as bicycle lanes.