Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 時制に注意しましょう。子どもの頃の話なので、「Yes, I have.」ではなく「Yes, I did.」を使います。また、「old sister」は不自然なので「older sister」、「a bike which she used to use」は「a bike she used to ride」のほうが自然です。最後は「I didn't use it much」と言うと簡潔で自然です。最初に直接答え、その後に理由や結果を加える構成はできています。

예시: Yes, I did. My older sister gave me a bike that she used to ride, but I wasn’t very good at cycling, so I didn’t use it much.

제안: 「especially my hometown Osaka」は「especially in my hometown, Osaka」とする必要があります。また、「more convenience」は名詞なので、「more convenient」と形容詞を使い、「use bike」は「ride a bike」または「use a bike」と言いましょう。「So yeah」や「umm」は減らすと、より流暢で効果的になります。理由は明確なので、「because」でつなぎ、狭い道路が自転車の利用につながることを自然に説明しましょう。

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Japan, especially in my hometown, Osaka. The roads there are often narrow and crowded, so riding a bike is more convenient than driving a car. It’s also a practical way to travel short distances.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question uses the past-tense auxiliary did: Did you have a bike...? Therefore, the short answer should also use did, not the present-perfect auxiliary have.

× My old sister gave me a bike which she used to use, but I was terrible at riding a bike so I didn't use a lot.

✓ My older sister gave me a bike that she used to use, but I was terrible at riding a bike, so I did not use it much.

Older is the appropriate adjective when comparing one sibling with another. Old usually describes age, while older is used for family members of greater age.

× My old sister gave me a bike which she used to use, but I was terrible at riding a bike so I didn't use a lot.

✓ My older sister gave me a bike that she used to use, but I was terrible at riding a bike, so I did not use it much.

The verb use normally needs a clear object in this sentence. The pronoun it refers to the bike, and much is a natural adverb for expressing a small amount of use. A comma also helps separate the two clauses.

× Yes, I think so, especially my hometown Osaka, because in my city the roads are so narrow.

✓ Yes, I think so, especially in my hometown, Osaka, because the roads in my city are so narrow.

The preposition in is needed before my hometown because it indicates the place where bikes are popular. The phrase the roads in my city is also a clearer and more natural structure.

× So yeah, it is umm, more convenience to use bike, not a car.

✓ So, yeah, it is more convenient to use a bike than a car.

Convenient is an adjective and is required after the linking verb is. Convenience is a noun, so it cannot directly describe the action of using a bike.

× So yeah, it is umm, more convenience to use bike, not a car.

✓ So, yeah, it is more convenient to use a bike than a car.

A singular countable noun such as bike normally requires an article. Use a bike when referring to a bike in general or to one nonspecific bike.

× So yeah, it is umm, more convenience to use bike, not a car.

✓ So, yeah, it is more convenient to use a bike than a car.

The comparative form more convenient should be followed by than when comparing two choices. The structure more convenient ... than ... clearly shows the comparison.