Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly using the simple past: “Yes, I had a bike.” Avoid “was having,” which is unnatural here. Also, use “I got it for my seventh birthday” or “It was given to me by my father” instead of “It was gifted by my father.” Your answer has a clear topic and a relevant personal detail, but you could add one specific description of the bike or explain how often you used it.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it for my seventh birthday, and my father gave it to me as a present. It was bright red, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school.

제안: State your main idea clearly and organize the comparison between young and older people. Use “among young people,” “older people,” and “cars,” rather than “in the young people,” “old age peoples,” and “cards.” Also, say “people aged seventeen to twenty-five.” Add a specific reason, such as bikes being affordable, convenient, or useful for exercise, and use a linking word like “however” to connect the contrast.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among teenagers and young adults aged seventeen to twenty-five. They are affordable, convenient, and a good way to exercise. However, older people generally prefer cars because they are more comfortable and practical for longer journeys.

× Yes, I was having the bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The simple past tense, had, is used to describe possession in the past. The past continuous form, was having, is not normally used for a permanent state such as owning a bike.

× Yes, I was having the bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Use the indefinite article a because you are mentioning a bike generally, not a specific bike that has already been identified. Use a bike, not the bike.

× Yes, the bikes are popular in my country mainly in the young people, not the old age peoples.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, mainly among young people, but not among older people.

When speaking about bikes in general, do not use the definite article the before bikes. The phrases young people and older people also refer to groups generally, so they do not need the.

× Yes, the bikes are popular in my country mainly in the young people, not the old age peoples.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, mainly among young people, but not among older people.

Use the preposition among when referring to a group of people. The phrase popular among young people is correct; popular in the young people is incorrect.

× Yes, the bikes are popular in my country mainly in the young people, not the old age peoples.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, mainly among young people, but not among older people.

People is already the plural form of person, so peoples is not appropriate here. Use older people instead of old age peoples. Also, young people is the correct plural expression.

× Yes, the bikes are popular in my country mainly in the young people, not the old age peoples.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, mainly among young people, but not among older people.

Old age peoples is not a natural adjective phrase for describing people. Use older people, which is the correct and natural expression.

× Old age peoples are found of the cards, but the young people between the age of the seventeen to twenty five.

✓ Older people are fond of cars, but young people aged seventeen to twenty-five prefer bikes.

The second part of the original sentence is incomplete because it has no main verb. Adding prefer creates a complete clause and clearly expresses the comparison between older and younger people.

× Old age peoples are found of the cards, but the young people between the age of the seventeen to twenty five.

✓ Older people are fond of cars, but young people aged seventeen to twenty-five prefer bikes.

The correct adjective is fond, not found. The fixed expression is be fond of, meaning like something. Older is also more natural than old age when describing people.

× Old age peoples are found of the cards, but the young people between the age of the seventeen to twenty five.

✓ Older people are fond of cars, but young people aged seventeen to twenty-five prefer bikes.

Use between ... and ..., not between ... to .... The revised phrase young people aged seventeen to twenty-five expresses the age range naturally and correctly.