Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly, then add one or two specific details. Improve accuracy by saying “It was yellow and blue” instead of “with the bright colors yellow, yellow and blue.” Use “a picture of the Madagascar characters” rather than “the picture for the curtain Madagascar.” Also, “riding my bike” is the correct phrase, not “writing to the bike.” Avoid repeating “yellow” and connect your ideas with linking words such as “because” and “with.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was yellow and blue, and it had pictures of the Madagascar characters on it. I loved riding it because I could have fun outdoors with my family and friends.

제안: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence and support it with a specific reason or example. Use the natural phrase “the rising price of petrol” instead of “the rise of prices for petrol,” and say “more popular” rather than “highly popular” in this context. Avoid fillers and the unfinished ending “Uh, so yep.” You could also mention another reason, such as environmental concerns or traffic congestion.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in my country, especially among young people. This is partly because petrol is becoming more expensive, and cycling is a cheaper way to travel. In addition, many people are choosing bikes because they help reduce traffic and pollution.

× I remember it was with the bright colors yellow, yellow and blue and also with the picture for the curtain Madagascar.

✓ I remember that it had bright colors—yellow and blue—and a picture of Madagascar on the curtain.

The preposition for is incorrect in this context. Use of to show what the picture represents, and use on to show its position on the curtain. The article a is also needed before picture because it refers to one nonspecific picture.

× I really love writing to the bike because I had a lot of fun with my family and friends together.

✓ I really loved riding the bike because I had a lot of fun with my family and friends.

The answer describes a childhood experience, so the past-tense form loved is more consistent than love. The natural expression is riding the bike, not writing to the bike. When ride has a bicycle as its direct object, no preposition is needed before the bike.

× For sure nowadays with the rise of prices for petrol, I think it's becoming highly popular among the younger generation.

✓ For sure, nowadays, with the rise in petrol prices, I think it's becoming highly popular among the younger generation.

The standard collocation is a rise in prices, not a rise of prices. Petrol prices is also a more natural noun phrase than prices for petrol. Use rise in when describing an increase in a quantity or price.