Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and use accurate articles and verb forms. Say “a smaller bike” rather than “smaller bike,” and replace the unclear structure “my parent told me how to cycle and when I was about seven” with a complete sentence. Use a linking word such as “At first” or “When I was about seven” to organize the time sequence. You could also add one specific detail about how often you rode or how you felt about cycling.

예시: Yes, I had a small bike when I was a child. When I was about seven, my parents taught me how to ride it. I often cycled to the park with my friend Angkin, and I really enjoyed spending time outdoors.

제안: Give a clear reason and avoid repeating words such as “cheap.” The second sentence is difficult to understand, so use simple, accurate phrases such as “They are affordable and convenient, especially for people who live in busy cities.” Provide a complete and specific example, such as students cycling to school or delivery workers using bicycles. Check pronunciation and word choice so that “delivery workers” and “buses” are communicated clearly.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. They are affordable and convenient, especially in busy cities where traffic can be heavy. For example, many students cycle to school, and delivery workers often use bicycles to get around more quickly.

× Well, yes, I had smaller bike when I was a child.

✓ Well, yes, I had a smaller bike when I was a child.

The singular countable noun bike requires an article. Use a before bike because the speaker is mentioning one nonspecific bike.

× I used to go to the park and ride with my friend Angkin and my parent told me how to cycle and when I was about seven.

✓ I used to go to the park and ride with my friend Angkin. My parent told me how to cycle when I was about seven.

The original sentence joins several ideas with and, and the phrase when I was about seven is placed awkwardly at the end. Separate the ideas into two sentences and place the time expression directly after the activity it describes.

× They are cheap and convenient for so cheap and say they have people of busy chafes.

✓ They are cheap and convenient, so many people with busy schedules use them.

So should connect a reason to its result. The original phrase for so cheap and say is not a grammatically correct conjunction structure. Use so to show that the low cost and convenience lead to people using bikes.

× For example, many students and Deliv use bus ces.

✓ For example, many students and delivery workers use buses.

The original sentence contains unclear or incomplete word forms, which makes its structure difficult to understand. Use clear plural nouns, such as students, delivery workers, and buses, and keep the subject before the verb.