Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly in the past tense: use “had” instead of “have,” “gave” instead of “used to give,” and “loved” instead of “love.” Say “red” or “red-colored” rather than “in red color.” Avoid fillers such as “uh,” and use a linking word such as “and” or “because” to connect your supporting details. A more natural answer would include one specific memory about riding the bike.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me when I was about six, and it was bright red. I loved riding it around my neighborhood because it made me feel independent.

제안: Give a clearer reason for your opinion and avoid repetition of “bikes” and “I think.” Use “many people,” not “many of people,” and avoid joining two complete sentences with only a comma. Explain who commonly rides bikes and why they are useful, using a linking word such as “because” or “especially.” More specific details, such as avoiding traffic or saving money, would make the answer more effective.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who live in crowded cities. Many people use them because they are affordable and help them avoid traffic. They are also a practical way to get exercise while commuting.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child ... and I love that bike a lot.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child ... and I loved that bike a lot.

The question asks about a past experience, so the past tense is needed. Use had instead of have and loved instead of love because both actions happened during the speaker's childhood.

× I remember it was in red color.

✓ I remember it was red.

The phrase in red color is not natural in this context. When describing the color of an object, use the adjective red directly after the linking verb was.

× Many of people ride bikes.

✓ Many people ride bikes.

Many is used directly before a plural countable noun. Do not use of between many and people when speaking generally.

× They love bikes, so it's useful also for everyone.

✓ They love bikes, so bikes are also useful for everyone.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Therefore, use the plural subject bikes with the plural verb are.

× Many of people ride bikes, they love bikes so it's useful also for everyone.

✓ Many people ride bikes, and they love bikes, so bikes are also useful for everyone.

The original sentence joins several independent clauses with commas, creating a comma splice. Use and and so to connect the ideas clearly, and use commas to separate the clauses.