Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答直接，细节也比较具体，符合“总述+补充细节”的结构。主要问题是搭配和语法不够自然：“covered by the Chinese traditional pattern dragon”应改为“decorated with traditional Chinese dragon patterns”；“set up two small lights”更自然地说“attached two small lights”；最后一句的比较对象不清楚，应明确说明灯是为了提高夜间骑行的安全性。另外，连接词“Additionally”使用正确，但可以换成更自然的“On top of that”。

예시: Yes, I had a white bicycle when I was a child. It was decorated with traditional Chinese dragon patterns, which made it look very distinctive. On top of that, I attached two small lights to the pedals to make night-time cycling safer.

제안: 回答了问题，也提供了受欢迎的原因，但存在较多词汇和语法问题。“Back while”应改为“Bikes are”；“environmental friendly traffic”应改为“an environmentally friendly form of transport”；“to avoiding people to meet traffic congestion”表达不自然，应改为“which helps people avoid traffic congestion”。此外，“most people”范围过大，建议改为“many people”，并补充具体场景，例如短途通勤或高峰期出行。

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in China, especially for short trips and commuting. Many people choose to cycle because it is an environmentally friendly form of transport and helps them avoid heavy traffic during rush hour. In addition, bike-sharing services have made cycling even more convenient.

× It was covered by the Chinese traditional pattern dragon.

✓ It was covered with a traditional Chinese dragon pattern.

表示某物的表面覆盖着某种材料、图案或装饰时，通常使用“covered with”，而不是“covered by”。“covered by”通常表示被某人或某物覆盖。

× It was covered by the Chinese traditional pattern dragon.

✓ It was covered with a traditional Chinese dragon pattern.

多个修饰词的顺序不正确。英语中应先说一般性质“traditional”，再说来源或国籍“Chinese”，然后说具体名词“dragon pattern”。

× It was covered by the Chinese traditional pattern dragon.

✓ It was covered with a traditional Chinese dragon pattern.

“pattern”是可数名词单数，且这里是第一次提到一个图案，因此应使用不定冠词“a”，而不是“the”。

× It would be safer than old ones.

✓ The lights made it safer than older bicycles.

上下文是在描述童年时的自行车，应该使用过去时。“would be”表示假设或过去将来，不适合这里对实际结果的描述。“made”表示这些灯使自行车更安全。

× Yes, Back while popular all over China, most people ride the bicycle to their destinations.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular all over China, and most people ride bicycles to their destinations.

“Back while popular”不能构成正确的句子结构，缺少清晰的主语和谓语。应改为完整句子“bikes are popular”。另外，连接两个完整分句时使用“and”会使结构更清楚。

× Back is sort of environmental friendly traffic to avoiding people to meet traffic congestion at the peak time.

✓ Biking is a sort of environmentally friendly transportation that helps people avoid traffic congestion during peak times.

“friendly”是形容词，修饰形容词时需要使用副词“environmentally”，所以应为“environmentally friendly”。此外，“traffic”通常不表示交通工具或交通方式，这里使用“transportation”更合适。

× Back is sort of environmental friendly traffic to avoiding people to meet traffic congestion at the peak time.

✓ Biking is a sort of environmentally friendly transportation that helps people avoid traffic congestion during peak times.

“to”后面应接动词原形，不能接“avoiding”。正确结构是“to avoid”。不过在这个句子中，使用“helps people avoid”更加自然；“help”后面接动词原形“avoid”。