Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly in the first sentence and use clearer, more accurate vocabulary. There are several serious word-choice and grammar problems, such as “ride basketball,” “training whale,” “my parent paught me,” “each every afternoon,” and “near our heart,” which make the meaning difficult to understand. Use “a small bicycle with training wheels,” “my parents bought it for me,” and “around the park near our house.” Also, the final idea is contradictory: explain that you were proud when you finally learned to ride without the training wheels. Keep the answer to three or four well-linked sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a small bicycle with training wheels when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was six, and I used to ride it around the park near our house every afternoon. I felt really proud when I finally learned to ride without the training wheels.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with one or two specific reasons. The current answer contains many unintelligible or inaccurate phrases, including “I go everywhere,” “my child,” and “They grow the vice into.” Use the plural noun “bicycles,” and avoid repeating “I see.” You could mention that children ride bikes for fun, while adults use them for exercise or short journeys. Finish the answer with a complete sentence and use linking words such as “for example” or “in addition.”

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among children and young adults. Many children ride them for fun, while adults often use them for exercise or to travel short distances. In addition, some people choose bikes because they are inexpensive and environmentally friendly.

× I had a small ride basketball with training whale.

✓ I had a small bicycle with training wheels.

Training wheels are normally used in the plural because a bicycle has two wheels. The original phrase also contains vocabulary errors, so the sentence has been corrected to express the likely intended meaning.

× That's my parent paught me when I was six.

✓ That was what my parents bought for me when I was six.

The question asks about a past experience, so the past form was is more appropriate than that's. The past-tense verb bought is also needed. Parents is plural because the sentence refers to both parents.

× That's my parent paught me when I was six.

✓ That was what my parents bought for me when I was six.

Parents should be plural when referring to more than one parent. Also, the noun phrase what my parents bought for me makes the sentence grammatically complete.

× I used to ride each every afternoon around the back near our heart.

✓ I used to ride every afternoon in the park near our house.

Each and every cannot be used together in this sentence. Use every before a time expression such as every afternoon. The phrase in the park near our house is also the natural grammatical expression for the likely intended meaning.

× I finally took the training wheel off because I couldn't ride on my own.

✓ I finally took the training wheels off because I couldn't ride on my own.

A bicycle normally has two training wheels, so the plural form wheels is required.

× I think bicycles are popular in my country because I go everywhere I see so much bicycles.

✓ I think bicycles are popular in my country because wherever I go, I see so many bicycles.

Bicycles are countable plural nouns, so many must be used instead of much. Much is used with uncountable nouns, such as traffic or water. The phrase wherever I go also creates a grammatically complete structure.

× I see my child the children seen me yet.

✓ I see children riding bicycles everywhere, and many of them are young.

The original sentence has an unclear and incomplete structure. It contains several noun and verb groups without a grammatical connection. The correction uses a clear subject, verb, and object structure.

× They grow the vice into

✓ They grow up riding bicycles.

The phrasal verb grow up is needed to describe children developing as they become older. Riding bicycles is used after grow up to explain the activity.

× They grow the vice into

✓ They grow up riding bicycles.

After grow up, the -ing form riding is used to describe an activity that continues during the process of growing up.