Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and well developed, with a clear topic sentence and specific details about the bike and your sister. However, use more natural word order and phrasing: say “a vibrant red bike” instead of “a red vibrant color bike,” and “a two-wheeled bicycle” instead of “a two wheel bicycle.” Avoid repeating “used to” unnecessarily; use the past continuous once to describe the background action. Also, “ride my bike” sounds more natural than “ride it.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a vibrant red, two-wheeled bicycle, and I really loved it. I often went cycling with my sister, who would sit on the back while I rode around our neighborhood.

제안: You answer the question directly and provide a relevant example, but the response contains repetition, grammatical errors, and an unfinished sentence. Use plural forms such as “children ride bikes,” and say “in the evening” rather than “in the evening time.” Organize the ideas with linking words, for example, “because” and “as a result,” and express the distance naturally as “for two or three kilometers” instead of “around two kilometers of radius.” End with a complete sentence.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. Many of them ride their bikes in the evening because it is a fun way to exercise and spend time with friends. We often ride together around the neighborhood for two or three kilometers, so it is also a good opportunity to socialize.

× I had a red vibrant color bike.

✓ I had a vibrant red bike.

When multiple adjectives describe a noun, opinion or quality adjectives such as vibrant usually come before color adjectives such as red. The word color is unnecessary here because red already describes the bike.

× It was a two wheel bicycle.

✓ It was a two-wheeled bicycle.

The adjective formed from wheel is two-wheeled. The past participle wheeled is used in a compound adjective and should be connected with a hyphen.

× In our country, most of the children ride bike, they ride bike in the evening time.

✓ In our country, most children ride bikes, and they ride bikes in the evening.

The plural noun bikes is needed because the sentence refers to bicycles in general. Also, most children is the more natural plural expression when speaking about children as a group.

× In our country, most of the children ride bike, they ride bike in the evening time.

✓ In our country, most children ride bikes, and they ride bikes in the evening.

Two independent clauses should not be joined only with a comma. Use a coordinating conjunction such as and, or separate the clauses with a full stop.

× They ride bike in the evening time.

✓ They ride bikes in the evening.

The standard expression is in the evening, not in the evening time. The definite article the is used before evening in this time expression.

× We get together and we enjoy our bike rides like we go for we go around two kilometers of radius or three kilometre of radius and we enjoy

✓ We get together and enjoy our bike rides. We ride around two or three kilometers, and we enjoy ourselves.

The original sentence contains repeated words and several clauses joined without a clear structure. Dividing the ideas into two sentences makes the meaning clear and grammatically complete.

× We go around two kilometers of radius or three kilometre of radius.

✓ We ride around two or three kilometers.

The phrase of radius is not needed when describing the distance of a bike ride. Use around followed directly by the distance, such as around two or three kilometers.

× We go around two kilometers of radius or three kilometre of radius.

✓ We ride around two or three kilometers.

Because the sentence refers to more than one kilometer, the plural form kilometers must be used. The same plural form applies to both possible distances.