Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сократите повторения и лишние заполнители (uh, um). Начните с прямого утверждения, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных поддерживающих детали в логическом порядке (например, кто дал велосипед, когда это произошло, какие чувства вы испытывали). Используйте связки (for example, later, then) и прошедшее время последовательно.

예시: No, I didn't own a bike as a child. My older brother had one and often persuaded me to try it; for example, he taught me to balance when I was eight. Later, when I was twelve, my mother bought me my own bike, and I felt very excited to ride it around the neighborhood.

제안: Уберите заполнители и повторения; исправьте слова (например, "trape" → "traffic") и стройте предложение яснее. Дайте одну-две конкретные причины и, при возможности, примеры или следствие (например, экономия времени, польза для здоровья). Используйте связки (because, so, therefore) и корректную грамматику.

예시: Yes, bikes have become quite popular in my country because heavy traffic makes cycling faster for short trips. For example, many commuters now ride foldable bikes to save time, and as a result cycling is becoming more common in cities.

× And after, uh, later when I grow up, my mom, uh, brought me a bike.

✓ And later, when I grew up, my mom brought me a bike.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. The context is about childhood (past), so 'grow' should be in past tense 'grew'. Also remove filler words and extra commas for clarity. Use 'grew up' (past) to match 'brought' (past simple). Suggestions: use consistent past tense for past events and avoid filler words like 'uh' in formal responses.

× Nowadays, uh, bikes are popular in my country because we have a lot of trape traffic jams and uh, uh, more people try, uh, to ride the bike and it's very, it's very, it's very popular and it's.

✓ Nowadays, bikes are popular in my country because we have a lot of traffic jams, and more people try to ride bikes; it is very popular.

There is a misspelled and incorrect noun 'trape traffic jams' — it should be 'traffic jams'. Also 'ride the bike' sounds singular; in this general statement use plural 'ride bikes'. Remove repetitions and filler words. Ensure plural agreement when speaking generally about people and bicycles. Suggestions: use correct noun 'traffic jams' and maintain plural form 'bikes' for general statements.