Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep answers concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using appropriate verb tenses and linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm, uh) and irrelevant personal information unless it directly answers the question. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood.

예시: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father used to take me to the local park on weekends so I could ride and practice. Those outings helped me become confident riding on busy paths.

제안: Answer directly and organize ideas with linking words. State your main opinion first, then support it with one or two clear reasons or examples. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'popular among teenagers', 'more popular than bicycles') and correct comparative structures. Remove hesitations and repeat phrases.

예시: I think bicycles are somewhat popular, especially among teenagers who cycle for exercise and short trips. However, motorbikes are more common for daily commuting because they are faster and more convenient in traffic.

× Yes, I have one bike when I was a child that my father brought me to the place, umm, where we usually sit around, uh, the park.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child that my father brought me to the park where we usually sat.

This sentence mixes present perfect 'have' with a past time phrase 'when I was a child' and contains awkward word order. Use simple past 'had' because the action happened in the past. 'Brought me to the place, umm, where we usually sit around, uh, the park' is wordy and disordered; reorder to 'brought me to the park where we usually sat.' Remove filler words for clarity and keep tense consistent. Suggestion: Use simple past for past events, place modifiers next to the noun they describe, and avoid fillers.

× Uh, actually my father and my mother was divorced since I was young, so me and my dad.

✓ Actually, my parents divorced when I was young, so I lived with my dad.

'My father and my mother was divorced' has subject-verb agreement and passive/tense issues. Use 'parents divorced' (active) with simple past 'divorced' because it refers to a past event. 'Since I was young' suggests a period continuing to present; if the intention is a past time, use 'when I was young.' The clause 'so me and my dad' is a fragment and ungrammatical; replace with a complete clause 'so I lived with my dad.' Suggestion: Use active voice and ensure each sentence has a subject and verb.

× Uh, at the moment I feel on bike is usually popular among the teenager in these days, but I feel like it's more than enough, umm not really popular as motorbike do because in the 21st century, umm, most of the teenagers prefer motorbikes so I feel like.

✓ At the moment, I feel that bicycles are usually popular among teenagers these days, but I think they are not as popular as motorbikes because in the 21st century most teenagers prefer motorbikes.

Multiple errors: 'on bike' is wrong preposition and noun form—use 'bicycles' or 'bikes.' 'the teenager' should be plural 'teenagers.' 'in these days' is incorrect; use 'these days.' 'not really popular as motorbike do' has comparison and verb errors; use 'not as popular as motorbikes.' Remove repeated fillers and redundant 'I feel like.' Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'bicycles are' and 'motorbikes prefer' corrected to 'most teenagers prefer motorbikes.' Suggestion: Use plural nouns when speaking generally, correct comparative structure 'not as ... as,' and avoid filler phrases.