Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, sentence flow and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and remove redundancy. For example, say when you got the bike, describe one memory, and explain how it made you feel using simple cohesive devices like “because” or “and”.

예시: Yes. I got a small black bike when I was five, and I rode it all around my neighborhood after school. Because I practiced every day, I became confident at balancing and doing small tricks. Riding calmed me down and always refreshed my mind.

제안: Work on grammar (subject-verb agreement), word choice, and clearer structure. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, “because” and “also”). Use correct phrases like “popular in my country,” “good for the environment,” and avoid vague or awkward expressions like “remove our depressed life.”

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap to use and good for the environment. For example, many commuters cycle to work to avoid traffic, and cycling also helps improve mental health because it is relaxing and reduces stress.

× It after school Cycling was great.

✓ Cycling after school was great.

The sentence has incorrect word order and tense presentation. 'After school' is a time phrase that should follow the verb or precede the verb phrase; placing it before 'Cycling' as 'It after school Cycling' is ungrammatical. Rearranging to 'Cycling after school was great' corrects the order and keeps past tense consistent. Suggestion: Place time expressions in a correct position (beginning or after the verb phrase) and keep the verb 'was' to show past tense.

× I exercise it always refresh my mind.

✓ Exercising always refreshes my mind.

This sentence mixes base verb form 'exercise' with the pronoun 'it' and an uninflected verb 'refresh'. The intended meaning is a habitual action, so use the gerund 'Exercising' as the subject and the third person singular present 'refreshes'. Remove the unnecessary pronoun 'it'. Suggestion: Use gerund subjects for activities (Exercising) and remember subject-verb agreement in present simple (refreshes).

× Pop bikes are popular in our country because it make mind fresh and give us relaxing.

✓ Bicycles are popular in our country because they make the mind feel fresh and help us relax.

Problems: 'Pop bikes' is likely a misspelling of 'Top bikes' or 'Popular bikes'; better to use 'Bicycles'. Pronoun 'it' mismatches plural subject; use 'they'. Verb 'make' needs plural agreement 'make' is fine with 'they', but phrase 'make mind fresh' needs article 'the mind' or 'us feel refreshed'. 'Give us relaxing' is ungrammatical; use 'help us relax'. Suggestion: Use correct noun 'bicycles', match pronouns to plural subjects, include articles where needed, and use correct verb forms for effects (help us relax, make us feel refreshed).

× Some people always use riding on bike and which is help in eco friendly and help to remove our depressed life too.

✓ Some people always ride bikes, which helps the environment and also helps reduce depression.

Multiple issues: 'use riding on bike' is incorrect; use 'ride bikes' or 'use bicycles'. The relative pronoun 'which' should refer to the action or thing; here 'ride bikes' leads to 'which helps the environment'. 'Is help in eco friendly' is ungrammatical and 'eco friendly' should be 'the environment' or 'be eco-friendly'. 'Remove our depressed life' is awkward; use 'reduce depression' or 'improve mental health'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'which helps'. Suggestion: Use 'ride bikes', make the relative clause refer clearly, use 'helps the environment' and a clear phrase for mental health improvements like 'reduces depression' or 'improves mental health'.