Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and fluency: correct verb forms and remove repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid repeating similar words (e.g., "relaxing" and "relaxed").

예시: Yes. My father gave me a pink bike for my sixth birthday, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood. I found cycling relaxing and it made me feel independent, so I often spent my afternoons practicing turns and riding to my friends’ houses.

제안: Focus on clear, specific points and correct pronoun use and sentence structure. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give two distinct supporting details with linking words (for example, "for instance" or "also"). Avoid repeating phrases and replace vague statements with concrete examples or short statistics if possible.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For instance, many children cycle to school because it is cheap and convenient; also, older people often ride for short trips or light exercise to stay healthy. In addition, affordable prices and good cycling paths contribute to their popularity.

× 'I really loved to riding the bike around my neighborhood, I find it relaxing and relaxed and feel so independent.'

✓ 'I really loved riding the bike around my neighborhood; I found it relaxing and felt very independent.'

'to riding' is incorrect because after 'loved' we use the gerund without to (verb + -ing). Also the sentence mixes present and past tenses: the student was describing past habitual action, so 'find' and 'feel' should be past tense 'found' and 'felt'. 'Relaxed and relaxed' is repetitive; use 'relaxed and felt very independent' or 'relaxed and independent'. Suggestion: use 'loved riding' and keep consistent past tense: 'I really loved riding the bike around my neighborhood; I found it relaxing and felt very independent.'

× 'They are inexpensive the bikes they are inexpensive in my country.'

✓ 'Bikes are inexpensive in my country.'

The original repeats the subject and includes an incorrect article placement 'the bikes they are inexpensive'. Remove redundancy and use correct word order: 'Bikes are inexpensive in my country.' Also 'inexpensive' does not need 'the' here. Suggestion: say 'Bikes are inexpensive in my country.'

× 'especially among children who cycle to school and older people who ride a bike for short trips to enhance your health.'

✓ 'especially among children who cycle to school and older people who ride bikes for short trips to improve their health.'

The clause mixes second-person 'your' with third-person subjects 'children' and 'older people'. Pronouns must agree with the subject; use 'their'. Also 'ride a bike' is better pluralized to 'ride bikes' to match general statement. 'Enhance your health' is awkward; 'improve their health' is clearer. Suggestion: maintain third-person plural pronoun agreement and consistent plurality: 'older people who ride bikes for short trips to improve their health.'

× '...older people who ride a bike for short trips...'

✓ '...older people who ride bikes for short trips...'

Using singular 'a bike' after plural subject 'older people' is inconsistent; use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally about multiple people. Suggestion: use plural nouns with plural subjects, e.g. 'people who ride bikes.'

× 'I had a pink bike that my dad gave me as a present on my sixth birthday.'

✓ 'I had a pink bike that my dad gave me as a present on my sixth birthday.'

This sentence is already correct in tense and structure. The verb 'had' and 'gave' correctly describe past events and need no change. No action required.