Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct basic mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail using linking words. Correct vocabulary ("Pike" → "bike") and grammar ("it was told stolen" → "it was stolen"). Avoid run-on sentences by splitting into two short sentences and use a linking word such as "however" or "so" for coherence.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me my first bike when I was about ten; however, it was stolen after only three months, so they bought me another one to replace it.

제안: Begin with a clear direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar and word choice ("That may be true 10 years ago" → "That was true ten years ago"). Use consistent terms ("motorbikes" and "electric bikes"). Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: They were more popular ten years ago, but not anymore. Nowadays most people prefer motorbikes or electric bikes because they are faster and more convenient for city travel.

× Yes I did, my parents bought me my first Pike when I was about 10 but it was told stolen after only three months so they bought me another one to replace this.

✓ Yes, I did. My parents bought me my first bike when I was about 10, but it was stolen after only three months, so they bought me another one to replace it.

Multiple past-tense actions are described, so sentences should be clearly separated and punctuation corrected. 'Pike' is a spelling error for 'bike'. 'Was told stolen' is incorrect passive phrasing; the correct passive is 'was stolen'. 'To replace this' is unnatural; use the pronoun 'it'. Suggestions: use commas and periods to separate clauses, use correct past passive 'was stolen', correct spelling 'bike', and replace 'this' with 'it'.

× That may true 10 years ago, but for now it's it's not true anymore because we mainly use motorbike or electrical bike rather than the traditional bike.

✓ That may have been true 10 years ago, but now it's not true anymore because we mainly use motorbikes or electric bikes rather than traditional bikes.

The original mixes present modal with a past reference. Use 'may have been' to indicate a possibility in the past. 'For now' is awkward; 'now' is preferred. 'It's it's' is a repetition error. Use plural forms 'motorbikes' and 'electric bikes' for general statements (singular/plural agreement). 'Electrical bike' is wrong collocation; 'electric bike' is correct. Also 'the traditional bike' should be 'traditional bikes' for a general comparison. Suggestions: use 'may have been' for past possibility, remove duplicate words, use correct collocations and plural nouns for general statements.