Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 全体として意味は伝わりますが、文法（時制の一致や助動詞の誤用）、冗長表現、まとまりのない構成を改善する必要があります。まずトピック文で直接答え、次に過去の経験を具体的に述べ、最後に現在の状況や感想で締めるとよいです。また時制は過去の話なら過去形で統一し、“Once I got used to it”のように表現を訂正してください。つなぎ言葉（for a while, then, after that）を使って論理的につなぐと自然です。語彙は“get around”は適切ですが、“using it”や“would”の誤用を避け具体例（年齢、場所、頻度）を加えると効果的です。

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. At first I couldn’t ride very well, so it took me a few months to learn. After I got used to it, I rode my bike almost every day to visit friends and go to the park. I still enjoy cycling now because it’s a quick and healthy way to get around.

제안: 回答は主旨を伝えていますが、論理の流れが乱れ、文法ミスと不完全な文が目立ちます。比較をするなら具体的な点（都市の自転車道の有無、通勤利用率など）を挙げ、接続語（for example, because, therefore）を使って理由を示してください。環境面の主張をする際は正確な語彙を使い、“doesn't emit CO2”のように表現し、数値や一般的な事実を一つ示すと説得力が増します。全体を2〜4文で簡潔にまとめてください。

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in Japan. For example, many people use bikes for short trips or to get to train stations, and many cities have bike parking and lanes. Because bicycles produce no CO2 while riding, they are also seen as an environmentally friendly option compared with cars.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but first I was not good at riding a bicycle so it took a long time to be good at using it.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but at first I was not good at riding a bicycle, so it took a long time for me to become good at it.

この文は過去の出来事について述べているため、時制と語句の選択を整える必要があります。'first'は文頭では通常'at first'とし、'it took a long time to be good at using it'は不自然であり、'for me to become good at it'のように表現します。また、適切な句読点を入れて読みやすくします。 Suggestions: use 'at first' for initial states, use 'for me to become' + adjective for improvement over time, and simplify redundant phrases.

× Once I get used to it, I would.

✓ Once I got used to it, I did.

この発言は過去の経験を述べているため、条件節と主節を過去形で統一する必要があります。'Once I get used to it'は現在時制で、主節の 'would' は仮定的で不明瞭なので、過去の事実を表すために 'Once I got used to it, I did' またはより自然に 'Once I got used to it, I enjoyed riding it' とします。 Suggestions: match tense in both clauses; avoid using 'would' when describing completed past events.

× I love to ride a bicycle to get around.

✓ I loved riding my bike to get around.

文脈が子供時代の話なので現在形'I love'より過去形 'I loved' を使うのが適切です。'ride a bicycle'は正しいが、口語では 'riding my bike' のほうが自然です。 Suggestions: keep tense consistent with narrative timeframe; prefer natural collocations like 'riding my bike'.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country in Japan compared to other European countries.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, Japan, compared to many European countries.

文は現在の一般的な事実を述べているため現在形は問題ないが、'in my country in Japan' は冗長で不自然です。'my country, Japan,' のように挿入句で明確にします。また 'other European countries' は比較の対象として 'many European countries' の方が自然です。 Suggestions: remove redundant prepositions and clarify with commas; choose appropriate comparative expression.

× It is normal to use public transportation or bikes to visit a lot of places and take Using bikes doesn't emit Co 8.

✓ It is normal to use public transportation or bikes to visit many places, and using bikes doesn't emit CO2.

この文は2つの独立した考えが混ざっており、'take Using bikes' のような誤った語順と綴りの問題があります。また 'a lot of places' は口語的なので 'many places' を推奨します。'Co 8' は 'CO2' の誤記です。 Suggestions: split or join ideas with proper conjunction and punctuation, fix word order, use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' in formal contexts, and correct chemical notation to 'CO2'.