Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and repetition. Also use past tense consistently and correct verb forms.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I usually rode it to school every morning, and in the afternoons my friends and I would cycle around the town to enjoy the scenery and visit parks.

제안: Clarify your opinion and correct grammar and word choice. Use present tense for general statements, link contrasting ideas with a cohesive connector like 'however' or 'but', and give a specific example of the problem. Avoid repetition and finish the sentence clearly.

예시: Yes, bicycles are and have been popular in my country. However, I hope my country becomes more bike-friendly in the future because many designated bike lanes are often occupied by parked cars or private vehicles, which makes cycling unsafe.

× I did have a bike when I was a child. I often use it to ride to go to school, uh, at when the school and I me and my friends bike around our town to look for the scenery.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it to go to school, and my friends and I biked around our town to enjoy the scenery.

Errors: incorrect use of 'did have' (unnecessary auxiliary in simple past), inconsistent verb tenses (mixing present 'use' with past narrative), awkward phrasing 'use it to ride to go to school' and duplicated pronouns 'I me and my friends'. Corrections: use simple past 'had' for possession in the past; change verbs to past tense 'rode' and 'biked' to match past time frame; reorder pronouns to 'my friends and I' and simplify phrase to 'biked around our town to enjoy the scenery'. Suggestion: Maintain consistent past tense for actions that happened in childhood and use clear subject order and concise verbs.

× Bikes were definitely popular in my country, but they hope hope my country will be more bike friendly in the future because sometimes the designated bike lane in our country are being used to buy a private vehicles and.

✓ Bikes were definitely popular in my country, but I hope my country will become more bike-friendly in the future because sometimes the designated bike lanes in our country are used by private vehicles.

Errors identified: incorrect pronoun/subject 'they hope hope' (should be 'I hope'); repetition 'hope hope'; incorrect adjective formation 'bike friendly' (needs hyphen as compound adjective 'bike-friendly'); subject-verb agreement 'lane ... are' (lane singular with are) and number mismatch 'a private vehicles' (singular article with plural noun); incorrect passive/verb phrase 'are being used to buy' (meaning unclear). Corrections: use 'I hope' for the speaker's wish; change to plural 'bike lanes' to match general statement and pair with 'are used'; use 'used by private vehicles' to show who uses lanes. Suggestion: Ensure subject and verb agree in number, avoid duplicated words, use correct article-noun agreement, and choose clear passive or active constructions.