Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: You should answer directly with correct tense and a clear structure: a topic sentence saying whether you had a bike, followed by 1–2 supporting details. Use past tense for childhood and avoid confusing phrases like “side bicycle.” Keep it under five sentences and use linking words (e.g., but, however) if needed. Specific fixes: change “I have no bike” to “I didn’t have a bike” and explain what you used instead (e.g., a tricycle or shared bike).

예시: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child. Instead, I used a small tricycle that belonged to my cousin, and I often rode it in the park near our house. However, I practiced balancing on two wheels on my father’s old bicycle until I could ride by myself.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then give specific reasons with correct vocabulary and grammar. Use linking words such as “because,” “for example,” or “however.” Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases (“in my side,” “have a price”). Use words like ‘affordable’ and ‘common’ correctly. Keep responses concise (1–3 sentences).

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, many people prefer bicycles for commuting to work or school, especially in crowded cities where cars are expensive and parking is difficult.

× When I was a child I have no bike while I have a side bicycle for riding.

✓ When I was a child I did not have a bike, but I had a small bicycle for riding.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was a child') so present tense verbs ('have') are incorrect. Use past simple: 'did not have' for negation and 'had' for affirmative. Also 'side bicycle' is not natural; 'small bicycle' fits context. Suggestion: use past simple consistently when talking about completed actions in the past. Grammar problem type ID:6

× In my side, bikes are am I excited? Bikes are popular because every almost every people every person in the country have a price have a bike because by car not very expensive and can easily affordable.

✓ In my area, bikes are very popular. Almost everyone in the country has a bike because cars are expensive and bikes are more affordable.

The original contains multiple issues: awkward phrase 'In my side' (use 'In my area'), an irrelevant phrase 'am I excited?' and repeated words. There are subject-verb agreement errors ('people... have' and 'every person... have') which need singular/plural alignment, and wrong adjective/adverb placement ('can easily affordable' is incorrect). The corrected version uses clear sentence structure, corrects subject-verb agreement ('everyone has'), and uses appropriate comparative wording ('cars are expensive' and 'bikes are more affordable'). This addresses sentence structure, redundancy, and agreement. Grammar problem type ID:26