Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve accuracy, grammar and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and pronouns (e.g., “it gave us” not “I gave us”), and fix noun-number and article errors (“the park and the backstreets”). Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). Add one specific detail (a memorable route or activity) and use a linking word to connect ideas (for example, “and” or “so”).

예시: Yes, I did. I got a small red bike when I was about eight, and I rode it around the neighborhood with my friend every afternoon. It gave us a real sense of freedom, and we especially liked cycling to the small park near my house. Often, we would race down the backstreets and explore different shortcuts, which felt like an adventure.

제안: Finish your response and correct vocabulary, grammar and phrasing. Use a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Remove extraneous words (e.g., “komati”) and fix countability and articles (“university towns”, “for leisure at weekends”). Use linking words like “because,” “however,” or “for example” to make the answer coherent. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Not really. Bicycles aren't very popular in my country because most people prefer scooters and cars for daily commuting. However, they are common in university towns and are often used for leisure cycling at the weekends. For example, students often ride to campus or to nearby parks for exercise.

× It was great because I gave us a sense of freedom and adventure as we explored park and backstreet near our homes.

✓ It was great because it gave us a sense of freedom and adventure as we explored the parks and backstreets near our homes.

The original uses 'I gave us', which is incorrect because the subject 'I' cannot 'give' 'us' in this context; the correct impersonal subject is 'it' (referring to having a bike). Also 'park and backstreet' should be plural and countable with definite or plural form 'the parks and backstreets' to match 'near our homes'. Use 'gave' (past tense) is correct to match 'It was great' and 'we explored'. Suggestion: use 'it gave us' and pluralize nouns when referring to multiple locations.

× Not really, bicycles aren't very popular in my country overall because most people prefer scooters and cars for daily commuting komati.

✓ Not really; bicycles aren't very popular in my country overall because most people prefer scooters and cars for daily commuting.

The original contains an extraneous word 'komati' which appears to be a typo or unintended insertion; remove it. Also the sentence is better punctuated with a semicolon or a period after 'Not really' to separate the responses. 'Daily commuting' is acceptable as a noun phrase; no tense change is needed. Suggestion: remove stray words and use appropriate punctuation: 'Not really; bicycles aren't very popular in my country overall because most people prefer scooters and cars for daily commuting.'

× They are used more in university town or for leisure cycling or weekends, but they are

✓ They are used more in university towns or for leisure cycling at weekends, but they are less common elsewhere.

The original has several issues: 'university town' should be plural 'university towns' when speaking generally; 'or for leisure cycling or weekends' is awkward—use 'for leisure cycling at weekends' or 'on weekends'. The clause ends abruptly with 'but they are' which is incomplete; complete the idea, e.g. 'but they are less common elsewhere.' Suggestion: pluralize general nouns, use correct preposition 'at' with 'weekends' in British English (or 'on weekends' in American English), and finish incomplete sentences.