Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence and add one brief specific detail. Avoid filler words like “uh” and repeating the same phrase. For example, state whether you had a bike and add a short detail about it (colour, who bought it, or how you used it).

예시: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that my parents gave me for my eighth birthday, and I used it every day to ride to the park with my friends.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear or unrelated words. Use cohesive connectors like “because” or “since” and give one or two concrete reasons (cost, traffic, environment) with a short example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and practical in crowded cities. For example, many people use bikes to commute short distances since traffic is often congested and parking is difficult.

× Yes, bikes are very in my country because they are cheap cities are crowded craft crowned tire bike.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and cities are crowded.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: missing adjective (popular), run-on sentence without conjunctions or punctuation, and several irrelevant or misordered words ('craft crowned tire bike') that make it ungrammatical. This fits 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26). Correction: supply the missing adjective 'popular', connect clauses with 'and', and remove unrelated words. Suggestion: plan sentences before speaking, use simple conjunctions to join ideas, and avoid inserting unrelated nouns; a clear version is 'Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and cities are crowded.'