Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha net, doğru dilbilgisi ve mantıklı bir yapı ile verilmeli. Konuya doğrudan başlamalı, gereksiz tekrar ve hatalı kelime kullanımından kaçınmalısınız (ör. "write" yerine "ride"). Bağlaçlarla neden-sonuç ilişkisini koyun, kısa ve doğal cümleler kullanın (maksimum 5 cümle). Örneğin: 1) Konu cümlesiyle başlayın, 2) boşluk/beden uyumsuzluğunu belirtin, 3) ebeveynlerin nasıl yardımcı olduğunu ve süreyi verin, 4) kısa sonuç cümlesi ile bitirin. Ayrıca dilbilgisi (past simple/past continuous) ve kelime seçimine dikkat edin.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a bit too large for me, but my parents helped me learn to ride it. Although they themselves didn't know how to ride as children, they taught me step by step and I got comfortable within a few months. Learning to ride helped me make friends in the neighborhood.

제안: Cevap daha düzenli ve dilbilgisi açısından doğru olmalı. "that pretty popular" yerine "they are quite popular" gibi doğru ifade kullanın. Gereksiz ve belirsiz ifadeleri (ör. "all of the other offices have a child") düzeltin ve somut örnekler verin. Bağlaçlarla fikirlerinizi bağlayın (e.g. "because", "for example", "also") ve kısa, özgün örneklerle destekleyin. Maksimum 5 cümlede kalın ve tekrarları azaltın.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many children ride bikes around their neighborhoods, and I made several friends by cycling with them. Also, a lot of adults remember having bikes when they were young, which shows how common they are. As a result, cycling is a familiar part of childhood here.

× Yeah, I used to have a bike when I was a child was what?

✓ Yeah, I used to have a bike when I was a child.

The original includes an extra fragment 'was what?' which makes the sentence ungrammatical and confusing. Remove the fragment to form a complete, coherent sentence. Suggestion: keep statements simple and avoid inserting question-like fragments in declarative sentences.

× It was a bit large for me, but I learned how to write it with my parents help.

✓ It was a bit large for me, but I learned how to ride it with my parents' help.

The word 'write' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'ride' when referring to bicycles. Also possessive form 'parents help' needs an apostrophe: 'parents' help'. Suggestion: use the correct verb for the activity and mark possession with an apostrophe.

× Even though they didn't know how to ride a bike and they couldn't learn when they were children, they could teach me and I learned in a few months.

✓ Even though they didn't know how to ride a bike and hadn't learned when they were children, they could still teach me, and I learned in a few months.

The sequence of tenses is awkward: use past perfect 'hadn't learned' to show their prior lack of skill. Also add 'still' to show contrast and include a comma before 'and'. Suggestion: use past perfect to indicate an earlier past action and include linking words for clarity.

× Yeah, I think that pretty popular in my country because when I was a child, all of the other offices have a child and I used to have friends that I made through riding a bike around the same area.

✓ Yeah, I think they are pretty popular in my country because when I was a child, all of the other kids had bicycles, and I used to have friends I made by riding a bike around the same area.

Several issues: 'that pretty popular' lacks a subject and verb—use 'they are pretty popular'. 'Offices have a child' is semantically wrong: likely 'other kids had bicycles'. Use past tense 'had'. Replace 'that I made through riding a bike' with 'I made by riding a bike' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: ensure clear subject-verb pairs and use appropriate nouns for meaning.

× And also many of my friends have memories about their bikes when they were children. So I think yeah.

✓ Also, many of my friends have memories of their bikes from when they were children. So I think so.

Use 'memories of' rather than 'memories about'. 'From when they were children' is more natural than 'when they were children' after 'about'. Ending 'So I think yeah' is informal and incomplete; 'So I think so' is clearer. Suggestion: prefer 'memories of' and use complete natural phrases in conclusions.