Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and slightly expand with one or two supporting details using a linking word. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief reason or example. Keep it under five sentences and avoid repeating words.

예시: Yes, I did. I learned to ride when I was about six, and I still own a bike now because I use it to commute to my office most days. It’s cheaper and faster than taking public transport, so I prefer it for short trips.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific and relevant reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Mention specific groups or places where bikes are popular, and use concrete facts or comparisons if possible. Keep the answer coherent and within five sentences.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in some parts of my country, especially in rural areas and among students. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips because they are inexpensive and easy to maintain, whereas in big cities people often prefer motorbikes or cars due to traffic and longer distances.

× Yes I did and I also have a bike now to go to my office.

✓ Yes, I did, and I also have a bike now to go to my office.

The original sentence mixes past and present without punctuation; while tense usage is acceptable (past for childhood, present for now), it needs a comma to separate clauses. Add a comma after 'Yes' and after 'did' to improve clarity and reflect the shift in time. Suggestion: 'Yes, I did, and I also have a bike now to go to my office.'

× I think probably in the back popular in my country because my country My country has a lot of people approximately around one hundred million. So

✓ I think bicycles are probably less popular in the countryside of my country because my country has a lot of people, approximately one hundred million.

The original sentence has multiple structure problems: unclear phrase 'in the back popular', repetition 'my country My country', and an unfinished sentence ending with 'So'. Correction clarifies meaning by using 'bicycles are probably less popular in the countryside', removes repetition, and combines number phrase correctly. Suggestions: use clear subject ('bicycles'), avoid repetition, replace vague 'in the back' with 'in the countryside', and finish the sentence without a trailing 'So'.