Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then briefly explain reasons with clear grammar and linking words. Avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases. Use past tense consistently and correct vocabulary (e.g., "bicycle", "parents couldn't afford one", "boys/girls"). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bicycle when I was a child. My parents couldn't afford one, and in my culture bicycles were usually bought for boys rather than girls. So I never had the chance to own one.

제안: Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "however"). Distinguish between bicycles and motorcycles and use correct words like "popular" and "motorcycles". Provide one or two concrete reasons and keep sentences simple and grammatically correct.

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Instead, many people prefer motorcycles because they are faster and more practical for work. Also, cultural norms mean boys often ride motorbikes more than girls, which reduces bicycle use.

× I didn't have because my parents have no money and also I'm not a boy.

✓ I didn't have one because my parents had no money and I wasn't a boy.

Pronoun and tense errors: 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'didn't have'. Use 'one' to refer to 'a bike'. 'I'm not a boy' refers to past context, so use past 'I wasn't a boy'. Improve by keeping tense consistent and using appropriate reference pronouns.

× In my culture is currently only back buys the pies boys because I'm a girl.

✓ In my culture, boys are usually the ones who get bikes because I am a girl.

Word order and article errors: original sentence has garbled structure and incorrect articles. Use passive or active clear structure: 'boys are usually the ones who get bikes'. Include a comma after introductory phrase. Avoid unnecessary definite articles and incorrect vocabulary.

× That's why I didn't have

✓ That's why I didn't have a bike.

Incomplete sentence: missing object 'a bike' makes sentence fragment. Add the noun to complete meaning and maintain tense consistency.

× No, I didn't think Okay in my country is a pablar motorcycle because the The job is the money, boys to make the money, then the package is not popular because the only place the boy is the child that's it.

✓ No, I don't think so. In my country motorcycles are more common because people use them to earn a living. Bikes are not very popular because boys are expected to work and children are not the main users.

Tense and structure errors: 'didn't think' should be 'don't think' to answer current opinion. Clarify meaning: use present simple 'are' for general truth. Fix vocabulary and sentence fragments; split into multiple clear sentences. Use correct subject-verb agreement and prepositions. Maintain coherence by expressing reasons clearly.