Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally relevant but incomplete and runs on without proper sentence boundaries. To improve, give a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Control sentence length and finish your thought. For example, mention how often you rode it, who you rode with, or a memory that shows your feeling.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a pink bicycle that I used to ride around my neighbourhood every afternoon. Because it was lightweight, I could ride fast and often raced my friends, which made those days really fun.

제안: The answer is clear but repetitive and a bit vague. Improve by using varied vocabulary, avoiding repetition, and adding a specific reason or example with a linking word to make your point more convincing (for example, mention commuting, affordability, or sports).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among young people. For instance, many students cycle to college because bicycles are cheap and convenient, and cycling is also a common leisure activity on weekends.

× Yes I did. I had a pink bicycle which I used to ride around my neighbourhood it was really beautiful and

✓ Yes, I did. I had a pink bicycle which I used to ride around my neighbourhood; it was really beautiful.

The original contains a run-on sentence missing appropriate punctuation between clauses. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use a semicolon or a period to separate independent clauses and add commas after introductory words like Yes. Also add a final punctuation mark. Suggestion: separate independent ideas with a period or semicolon and include commas after interjections to improve clarity.

× Yes, in my country bikes are really very popular, especially among the youngsters, among the boys.

✓ Yes, in my country bikes are really popular, especially among young people and boys.

The phrase 'among the youngsters' is wordy and the repetition 'among the boys' is redundant; 'youngsters' is informal and the double 'among' is unnecessary. This is primarily an incorrect use/choice of prepositional phrase and word choice (ID 11). Also 'really very' is redundant—use one intensifier. Suggestion: use 'young people' or 'youngsters' once, avoid repeating 'among', and choose a single intensifier such as 'really' or 'very', not both.