Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure: answer directly in past tense for childhood, avoid repetition, and keep to 2–3 concise sentences. Add one specific supporting detail (when or why). Use linking words if adding extra information.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I plan to buy one in the future because I enjoy riding for exercise and because it gives me a sense of freedom.

제안: Make the response more natural and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar and avoid vague phrases like '+2'—explain it (e.g. after high school). Combine similar ideas and provide a specific example or statistic. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example'.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for daily travel. For example, after finishing high school students often ask their parents for a bike so they can commute to college more easily.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child but I love a bike and in my future I'll sure I'll purchase a bike because I love riding and it gives me a freedom and it's my favorite hobby to ride a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I love bikes and in the future I will surely buy one because I enjoy riding; it gives me freedom and riding is my favorite hobby.

Errors: incorrect tense mix (present 'don't have' vs past 'was a child') and redundant/awkward phrasing. Use past tense 'didn't have' for childhood. Use plural 'bikes' or 'a bike' consistently and avoid repeating 'bike'. 'In my future' is unnatural; use 'in the future'. 'I'll sure I'll' is ungrammatical; use 'I will surely'. Use 'buy one' instead of 'purchase a bike' to avoid repetition. 'Gives me a freedom' uses incorrect article; use 'gives me freedom'. This yields clearer, grammatically correct sentences.

× Yeah, I think bikes are popular in our country because most of the teenage boys have their own bike.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because most teenage boys have their own bikes.

Minor issues: 'Yeah' is informal; 'Yes' is better. 'Most of the teenage boys' is wordy—use 'most teenage boys'. Subject 'boys' is plural so noun should be plural 'bikes' not 'bike'. This fixes number agreement and improves formality.

× After their +2 they demand their parents to have their own bike so they can go college with bike.

✓ After completing their +2, they ask their parents to buy them a bike so they can go to college by bike.

Problems: awkward phrasing and incorrect verb patterns. 'Demand their parents to have their own bike' is incorrect; use 'ask their parents to buy them a bike' or 'ask their parents for a bike'. Add 'completing their +2' to clarify timing. Use 'go to college' and 'by bike' for correct prepositional phrase. This corrects sentence structure and preposition usage.

× And in my country most of the people have their own bike. They.

✓ In my country, many people own their own bikes.

Original is repetitive and ends abruptly. 'Most of the people' is better as 'many people' or 'most people'; 'own their own bike' is redundant—use 'own bikes' or 'have their own bikes'. Remove the trailing fragment 'They.' to form a complete sentence.