Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and correct mistakes, avoid repetition, use a clear topic sentence and specific details. Fix vocabulary errors (e.g., ‘writing’ → ‘riding’), remove the odd phrase about the cat, and keep to 2–4 sentences. Add a brief linking phrase to make the story coherent.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents found an old bicycle on the street and my dad repaired it, removing rust and replacing the tires. As a result, I used that bike throughout my childhood to visit friends and explore my neighborhood.

제안: Finish your answer fully and avoid repetition. Start with a clear direct sentence, then contrast rural and urban situations using linking words (e.g., 'however'/'on the other hand'). Provide a specific example or consequence to show depth.

예시: Yes, but it depends on the area. In rural regions bicycles are common because roads are wider and people use them for short journeys to markets. However, in cities cycling is less popular since narrow streets and a lack of bike lanes make it unsafe, so many people prefer public transport or scooters.

× Oh, absolutely. I got this bike that my cat that my parents literally picked up from the side of the street.

✓ Oh, absolutely. I got this bike that my parents literally picked up from the side of the street.

The original sentence contains a redundant and incorrect phrase 'that my cat that my parents', which is a sentence structure error (type 26). It appears 'my cat' was inserted mistakenly and breaks the relative clause. Remove the extraneous 'my cat' to make the relative clause correct: 'a bike that my parents picked up from the side of the street.' This preserves meaning and corrects the structure. Suggestion: read sentences aloud to spot accidental insertions and keep relative clauses with a single clear antecedent.

× My dad transformed it from an old rust bucket into a brand new one and I have been writing it ever since.

✓ My dad transformed it from an old rust bucket into a brand new one and I have been riding it ever since.

The problem is an incorrect word choice where 'writing' is used instead of the present participle 'riding' (type 10). 'Writing' is unrelated to riding a bike and is a spelling/word selection error. Use 'riding' to indicate continuous experience since the past: 'I have been riding it ever since.' Suggestion: check verbs to ensure they match the intended action; for bike use 'ride/riding.'

× From what I've known, bikes are popular in rural areas as there are wider roads and bicycle lanes there.

✓ From what I know, bikes are popular in rural areas because there are wider roads and bicycle lanes there.

'From what I've known' incorrectly uses the present perfect ('I have known') where a simple present expression is more natural (type 6). Use 'From what I know' to report current general knowledge. Also 'as' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer. Suggestion: use simple present to express general facts and perceptions: 'From what I know.'

× However, in urban areas, the streets and sidewalks are often too narrow and there are and there are no bike lanes so

✓ However, in urban areas the streets and sidewalks are often too narrow and there are no bike lanes, so people rarely use bicycles there.

The original sentence repeats 'and there are' and ends abruptly, causing a sentence structure error (type 26). Remove the duplicate fragment and complete the sentence with an appropriate result clause. Also add a subject for the result ('people') to clarify who is affected. Suggestion: avoid repeated phrases and ensure sentences are complete with a main clause and a result or conclusion when using 'so.'