Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural and directly responds to the question, but it is very short and could be improved by adding one or two specific supporting details. Use a clear topic sentence, then add a brief example or reason with a linking word (e.g., “because” or “for example”). Keep responses concise (maximum 5 sentences).

예시: Yes, I did. I loved riding it around the block near my house because I enjoyed the freedom it gave me. For example, I would race my neighbor every afternoon after school and practice balancing tricks on the pavement.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has problems with coherence, hesitations, repetition and vague phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting points linked with connectors (e.g., “because” / “however”). Avoid filler words (uh, and) and repeating fragments. Be more specific about where and why bikes are popular and give a concise example or consequence.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many families own them and children often use them for short trips. However, they can cause safety issues in busy streets; for instance, kids racing in residential roads sometimes make crossing difficult for pedestrians.

× I think it is pretty common in my country, Like kids ride it all of the time in streets, in the neighborhood, uh, with their friends racing with the, which is kind of annoying for people who are crossing the road.

✓ I think they are pretty common in my country. Kids ride them all the time in the streets and in the neighborhood with their friends, racing, which is kind of annoying for people who are crossing the road.

The sentence refers to 'bikes' (plural), so pronouns and verbs must match plural form. 'It is' should be 'they are'; 'kids ride it' should be 'kids ride them'; 'in streets' needs the definite article 'the streets'. Also removed extraneous filler language and repaired sentence structure for clarity. Suggestion: identify the noun's number (singular/plural) and ensure pronouns and verbs agree, and use articles before countable plural nouns when referring to specific places.

× But for kids, I think it, they, it's fine and, and they love riding it, playing with.

✓ But for kids, I think it's fine, and they love riding bikes and playing with them.

Mixed and redundant pronouns 'it, they, it's' create confusion. 'Riding it' should match plural 'bikes' as 'riding bikes' and 'playing with' needs an object ('them'). Suggestion: keep pronoun references consistent with the noun's number and finish phrasal verbs with their objects; simplify by using 'bikes' and 'them' to maintain clarity.