Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện rõ ràng và ngắn gọn câu chủ đề, tránh tiếng ậm ừ (uh, um) và lặp từ. Nên dùng cấu trúc ngắn gọn (1-2 câu) nêu trực tiếp rồi thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ tuổi, nơi học, phương pháp dạy của cha). Dùng liên từ để nối ý nếu cần (for example, because, so).

예시: Yes. I learned to ride a bike in seventh grade when my father taught me. He was very patient and held the seat while I pedaled, and after a few tries I could ride on my own, which became a fond childhood memory.

제안: Tránh nói lắp (uh, um, I guess) và hoàn thành ý nghĩa của câu. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích với chi tiết cụ thể (ai sử dụng, lý do, ví dụ). Sử dụng từ nối để mạch lạc (for example, because, therefore). Hạn chế câu chưa hoàn chỉnh và thêm một kết luận ngắn.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular, especially among students. Because many students commute short distances to school and want a cheap, convenient option, you can see many bikes parked near schools and public transport stops.

× I first learned how to ride a bike when I was at 7th grade and my dad used to teach me how to ride that bike.

✓ I first learned how to ride a bike when I was in seventh grade, and my dad used to teach me.

The phrase 'at 7th grade' is incorrect; use 'in seventh grade'. Also 'that bike' is unnecessary and repetitive; omit it. 'Seventh' should be spelled out in formal speech. Use past tense 'learned' and 'used to teach' is correct so keep them.

× And that was one of the most, uh, unforgettable memory, uh, from my childhood.

✓ And that was one of the most unforgettable memories from my childhood.

The noun 'memory' must be plural when modified by 'one of the most', so use 'memories'. Also remove filler words and the extra comma. Use 'most unforgettable memories' for grammatical agreement.

× He was very patient and he helped me.

✓ He was very patient, and he helped me learn.

The original is grammatical but could be more complete. Adding 'learn' clarifies what he helped with; this improves sentence structure and clarity.

× Yes, it is one of the main means of transportation for uh students, I guess because the umm like I can see it basically everywhere on the street uh, mostly students, uh, I guess that they since they have to wait until.

✓ Yes, bicycles are one of the main means of transportation for students, I guess, because I can see them basically everywhere on the streets, mostly used by students who have to wait for public transport.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it is' is wrong when referring to 'bicycles'—use plural 'bicycles are'. 'Means' is fine but use plural subject. Replace vague fragments and fillers with clear clauses. Use 'them' to refer to bicycles. 'On the street' -> 'on the streets'. Complete the thought about why students use bikes by saying 'who have to wait for public transport'.