Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Улучшите грамматику и естественность речи, сократив лишние паузы и слова-паразиты. Исправьте форму глагола (вместо "didn't used to" — "I didn't use to" или "I never had"). Дайте чёткое вводное предложение, затем одно или два подробных предложения с конкретной информацией (например, почему не научили, и что вы сейчас думаете об этом). Используйте связки (for example, because, so) и избегайте чисел и неясных фраз в конце.

예시: I never had a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was unsafe. As a result, I never learned to ride, and that's something I still regret. For example, I missed out on playing with neighborhood children and exploring nearby parks.

제안: Сделайте ответ более сжатым и плавным: начните с чётного утверждения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных примера или причины с логическими связками (for instance, because, therefore). Избавьтесь от повторов («nowadays» дважды) и звуковых пауз. Используйте точную лексику (commuting, recreational cycling, bike lanes).

예시: Yes, bikes are becoming very popular in my country because more people care about fitness and the environment. For instance, many cities have built bike lanes, so people use bicycles for commuting and weekend recreation.

× I didn't used to have a bike in my childhood, umm, unfortunately I've never had a chance to ride a bike and my parents didn't teach me how to do that.

✓ I didn't use to have a bike in my childhood; unfortunately I've never had a chance to ride a bike, and my parents didn't teach me how to do it.

The auxiliary 'did' requires the base form 'use' (not 'used') in negative past habitual constructions: 'didn't use to'. Also replace 'that' with 'it' for natural reference to 'ride a bike'. Use punctuation to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Practice forming negatives with 'did' + base verb (e.g., 'didn't go', 'didn't use to'). Use 'it' to refer back to actions and add commas/semicolons to separate ideas.

× Uh, but that's my, one of my biggest dream.

✓ But that's one of my biggest dreams.

The phrase 'one of my biggest dream' has incorrect word order and singular 'dream' should be plural after 'one of my'. Remove the unnecessary comma and leading filler 'Uh'. Suggestion: Use the structure 'one of my + plural noun' (e.g., 'one of my goals', 'one of my dreams').

× If we start comparing the past and the present, I would definitely say that nowadays, uh, people are more keen on riding bikes and leading healthy lifestyles umm, and nowadays you can see a lot of people, umm, spending time outdoors uh, they ride it ride bikes they.

✓ If we compare the past and the present, I would definitely say that nowadays people are keener on riding bikes and leading healthy lifestyles, and you can see a lot of people spending time outdoors riding bikes.

Use 'compare' rather than 'start comparing' for a general conditional; 'keener' is the comparative form of 'keen'. Avoid repeating 'nowadays' and fix the redundant/fractured ending 'they ride it ride bikes they' by combining ideas: 'spending time outdoors riding bikes'. Suggestion: Use concise present tense for general comparisons and ensure comparatives (keener) and gerunds (riding) are used correctly.