Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear, grammatically incorrect and repetitive. To improve: 1) Give a clear direct topic sentence answering the question. 2) Use one or two brief supporting details with correct tense and pronouns. 3) Avoid repetition and irrelevant phrases. 4) Keep it under 4–5 sentences and use linking words like “but” or “however” to connect ideas. Specific fixes: use past tense for childhood, correct possessive forms (my father bought me a bicycle), and a clear reason or brief anecdote if needed.

예시: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child. Instead, my father bought a bicycle for me on my tenth birthday, and I often rode it with my friends. However, I wasn’t very confident at first, so my father usually supervised our rides until I felt comfortable.

제안: Your response shows a positive idea but is vague and contains unclear phrasing. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion. 2) Provide two specific reasons (commuting, cost, health) linked with cohesive devices like “because” and “for example.” 3) Use precise vocabulary (commute, affordable, convenient) and complete sentences. 4) Keep answers concise and coherent.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to commute. For example, many people use bicycles to travel short distances to work or school, especially in crowded cities where traffic is heavy.

× No, I did not have a bike because I have a bicycle with my father bought for me on my birthday because I am not a good driver.

✓ No, I did not have a bike because my father bought a bicycle for me on my birthday, and I am not a good rider.

Pronoun and noun phrase order is incorrect and confusing. 'I have a bicycle with my father bought for me' mixes subjects and objects. Replace with 'my father bought a bicycle for me' to show correct agent and recipient. Also 'driver' is incorrect for bicycles; use 'rider'. Use conjunction 'and' to connect related ideas. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× So I drive bicycles with my friends because one of my friends is also a bicycle bike so I when I

✓ So I ride bicycles with my friends because one of my friends also has a bike.

Sentence is fragmented and contains redundant words 'bicycle bike' and wrong verb 'drive' for bicycles. Use 'ride bicycles' and simplify 'one of my friends also has a bike' to express the idea clearly. Remove incomplete clause 'so I when I'. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Um, yes, I believe bikes are very popular in my country because many people do enjob so they spend so because bikes are time consuming less time consuming and when people according to their timetable they

✓ Um, yes, I believe bikes are very popular in my country because many people enjoy them. Bikes take less time for short trips, and people use them according to their schedules.

Multiple problems: 'do enjob' is incorrect form—use 'enjoy'. 'are time consuming less time consuming' is contradictory; correct to 'take less time for short trips' to convey meaning. Fix tense consistency and complete the final clause to a grammatical statement. Grammar problem type ID: 6