Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is direct and natural but very short and lacks detail. To improve, add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., what kind of bike, how you used it, a brief memory) and use a linking phrase to make it coherent. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I had a small red bicycle when I was a child. I used it to ride around the neighborhood with my friends after school, and it helped me feel independent. For example, I remember learning to ride it on a quiet street near my house.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but is long and slightly repetitive. Improve coherence by starting with a clear topic sentence, then use a linking word to introduce specific reasons and a brief example or comparison. Vary vocabulary (e.g., "motorbikes" or "scooters") and break into 2–3 sentences to stay natural and concise.

예시: Generally, bicycles are not as popular in my country as motorbikes or cars. One reason is that people find motorbikes more convenient for long or crowded commutes; meanwhile, bicycles are mainly chosen by those who are health-conscious or environmentally aware. For instance, I see cyclists mostly in parks or on weekend bike paths rather than in daily city traffic.

× Bikes are not much preferred in my country as the preferred mode of transportation is usually by motorcycles, scooty or car to travel anywhere and bicycles are used by people who are health conscious and for someone who wants to do good to the environment

✓ Bikes are not much preferred in my country, as the preferred modes of transportation are usually motorcycles, scooties, or cars for traveling anywhere, and bicycles are used by people who are health-conscious or by those who want to help the environment.

Problems: (1) Singular and plural agreement: 'mode' should be plural 'modes' because multiple vehicle types are listed; 'motorcycles, scooty or car' mixes plural and singular—make all items plural ('scooties, or cars'). (2) Subject-verb agreement tied to plurality: 'is usually' should be 'are usually' to match plural 'modes'. (3) Word choice and parallelism: 'by motorcycles, scooty or car to travel anywhere' is awkward—use 'motorcycles, scooties, or cars for traveling anywhere' for parallel structure. (4) Hyphenation and word choice: 'health conscious' should be hyphenated 'health-conscious' when used as an adjective. (5) Pronoun/phrase clarity: 'for someone who wants to do good to the environment' is informal and awkward—use 'by those who want to help the environment'. Suggestions: ensure consistent plural forms when listing items, align verb number with the subject, maintain parallel structure in lists, hyphenate compound adjectives, and prefer clearer phrasing for intentions.