Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid unnecessary words and grammar slips (e.g., “he or she left me” → “when they weren’t using it”). Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., “couldn’t afford” is good; you can add “at the time” for clarity).

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because my family couldn’t afford one. However, I often borrowed my cousin’s bike when they weren’t using it to ride to school or play with friends.

제안: Make the response more fluent and structured: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Remove fillers (uh, umm) and correct singular/plural (say “bicycles” or “bikes”). Use clear linking words such as “because” or “for example.”

예시: Yes, bikes are still quite popular in the Philippines because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel. For example, many students and workers ride bicycles to school or to nearby jobs, especially in urban and suburban areas where traffic and short distances make cycling practical.

× I usually borrowed my cousin's bike when he or she left me.

✓ I usually borrowed my cousin's bike when he or she left it with me.

The original sentence is awkward because 'left me' suggests leaving the person rather than the bike; the verb 'left' here needs a direct object 'it' (the bike) to clarify what was left. Also, context is past tense, so 'left it with me' correctly shows the bike was left in the speaker's possession. Suggestion: include the object 'it' or rephrase as 'when he or she lent it to me.'

× In my opinion, I believe that bike is still popular in our country, Philippines since most of the times, uh, you can uh, see people riding on their bike when they go to school, when they go to work.

✓ In my opinion, I believe that bikes are still popular in our country, the Philippines, since most of the time you can see people riding their bikes when they go to school or to work.

Multiple issues: 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match general statement about people; 'most of the times' is incorrect — correct is 'most of the time' or 'most of the timeS' rarely used; 'people riding on their bike' is wrong preposition and number-agreement — use 'riding their bikes.' Also add definite article 'the' before 'Philippines.' Remove filler words. Suggestion: use plural nouns and correct fixed expressions: 'bikes are still popular,' 'most of the time,' 'riding their bikes.'

× And of course, umm, it is applicable for us since, uh, transportation.

✓ And of course, it is useful for us as a means of transportation.

The phrase 'it is applicable for us since, transportation' is ungrammatical. 'Applicable' is not the right adjective here; 'useful' fits better. Also 'since' followed by a noun is awkward; use 'as' or 'as a means of' to link to 'transportation.' The original lacks clarity and correct article use. Suggestion: rephrase to 'useful for us as a means of transportation.'

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one.

This sentence is grammatically correct in tense and structure. It uses past simple consistently ('didn't have,' 'was,' 'couldn't afford'). No correction needed.