Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Structure your response with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and nouns, and concise supporting details (1–3 short sentences). Use correct verb forms (past simple) and correct nouns (bike, prize) and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific details about how you used the bike. For example, begin with “Yes, I did” then mention who gave it, at what age, and one specific memory. Use linking words such as “because” or “so” to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a bicycle for my eighth birthday, and I used it every day to ride to school by myself. Because it was light and easy to handle, I felt more independent and often rode with my friends after classes.

제안: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then explain with specific reasons and a contrast using linking words (e.g., “however,” “in contrast,” “because”). Use correct vocabulary (bike/bicycle) and plural forms. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid fillers like “I am not sure” unless you qualify briefly.

예시: It depends — bicycles are more popular in smaller towns but less common in big cities. In small towns people often use bikes for short trips and errands, whereas in large cities people prefer cars or public transport because of traffic and longer distances.

× Definitely when I have when I have the trial I have a bite.

✓ Definitely when I was little, I had a bike.

The student uses present tense 'have' repeatedly though referring to the past. Use past simple 'had' to describe possession in childhood. Also 'trial' and 'bite' are incorrect vocabulary; corrected to 'little' and 'bike'. Suggestion: use past tense for past events and choose correct nouns.

× The this bite was my mother buy me as my 8 years old birthday gift.

✓ This bike was bought for me by my mother as my 8th birthday gift.

Multiple errors: 'The this' is redundant and incorrect; use a single demonstrative 'This'. Use past passive 'was bought' to show the action had been done to the bike. 'My mother buy me' must be rephrased to 'bought for me by my mother'. Also '8 years old birthday' should be '8th birthday'. Suggestion: use correct article/demonstrative, past passive for purchased objects, and ordinal numbers for ages/events.

× I really like this spice because after I have this bite I use it every day go to school by myself.

✓ I really liked this bike because after I got it I used it every day to go to school by myself.

The student mixes present tense 'like' and 'have' while recounting past habits. Use past simple 'liked', 'got', and 'used'. Also 'spice' and 'bite' are wrong words; corrected to 'bike'. Add 'to' before 'go to school'. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistently when describing past experiences and include necessary infinitive marker 'to'.

× I am not sure it is hard to say.

✓ I'm not sure; it's hard to say.

This sentence needs contraction/punctuation and consistent present tense. 'I am not sure it is hard to say' is grammatically awkward; better as two clauses with punctuation. No tense change needed but clarity and punctuation improve sentence flow. Suggestion: use punctuation or conjunction to separate ideas.

× It depends on what kind of city.

✓ It depends on what kind of city it is.

The clause 'what kind of city' is incomplete as a complement; add 'it is' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: complete noun clauses with appropriate verbs/pronouns.

× If in some small city bi is popular, but in the big city buyers are not popular.

✓ In some small cities bikes are popular, but in big cities bikes are not popular.

Multiple number errors: 'bi' should be 'bike'; 'city' should be plural 'cities' when speaking generally. 'Buyers are not popular' is incorrect; likely meant 'bikes are not popular'. Also avoid mixing 'if' with 'but'—use a simple contrast structure. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking generally and ensure subjects match intended meaning.