Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer, more grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct vocabulary (bike, back → bike) and tense consistency. Avoid filler words like “uh” and unnecessary repetition. For example, state when you got the bike, who gave it, and a brief memory or feeling to make your answer vivid.

예시: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child. I received it as a birthday present from my parents when I was eight, and I remember riding it every afternoon after school. Because of that bike, I learned to be more independent and spent many happy hours outdoors.

제안: Improve clarity and organization: begin with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors (for example, because / furthermore). Use correct vocabulary (bike, not back) and correct grammar (e.g., “good for the environment,” “economical for daily routines”). Avoid run-on phrases and be specific about who uses bikes and in what situations.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular. In China many people use bikes because they are cheap and convenient for short trips, and they also help reduce air pollution. Furthermore, in Canadian cities cycling is growing in popularity due to better bike lanes and health awareness.

× Yes, I had a bike where I was a child and I have a lot of fun things with my back.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I had a lot of fun with my bike.

The student used 'where' instead of 'when' to refer to time (use 'when'). 'Back' is a misspelling of 'bike' and the phrase 'have a lot of fun things with my bike' is unidiomatic; use 'had a lot of fun with my bike' to match past time. Also maintain past tense consistency.

× Uh, the first time got a bike as a birthday gift and I was surprised at that time and I sure.

✓ The first time I got a bike was as a birthday gift and I was very surprised.

Missing subject 'I' before 'got' and awkward phrasing 'and I sure'. Use past tense 'got' with subject and simplify to 'I was very surprised' for clarity. Remove redundant 'at that time'.

× Yes, I'm living in Canada right now and my home country is China and I think the back is pretty popular way to to know that affect the environment snat and for the daily routine it's also economic.

✓ Yes, I'm living in Canada right now; my home country is China, and I think the bike is a very popular way to reduce environmental impact and for daily routines it is also economical.

Multiple problems: 'back' should be 'bike' (word choice); 'popular way to to know that affect the environment snat' is garbled—correct to 'popular way to reduce environmental impact'. 'It's also economic' should be 'it is also economical' (adjective form). Maintain present tense 'I'm living' and 'I think'. Also correct prepositions and word order for clarity.

× and for the daily routine it's also economic.

✓ and for daily routines it is also economical.

Use 'economical' instead of 'economic' to describe something that saves money. Use plural 'daily routines' or 'daily use' for natural phrasing and remove 'the' before 'daily routine'.