Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise: give a direct topic sentence then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., what kind of bike, how you used it, a brief memory). Use linking words like “and” or “so” to connect ideas. Avoid unnecessary words such as “did have” — simply say “Yes, I had a bike.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I used it to ride around the neighbourhood with my friends after school.

제안: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence then provide specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore, also) and correct grammar (use consistent tense and plural forms). Avoid awkward phrasing like “had it” and improve clarity: say “had one” or “used bikes.”

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical. For example, many people use bicycles to commute short distances, and even older generations, like my parents, used to ride bikes when they were young.

× Yes, I did have a bike as a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence uses the emphatic past construction 'did have' which is grammatically possible but sounds unnatural in response to 'Did you have...?' Using the simple past 'I had' is more natural and concise. Also change 'as a child' to 'when I was a child' to match the examiner's phrasing and improve naturalness. Suggestion: Use simple past 'had' for affirmative answers to 'Did you...' questions unless you need emphasis.

× Yes, I believe bikes are extremely popular in my country and many of my friends had it, even my parents had it as when they were children.

✓ Yes, I believe bikes are extremely popular in my country, and many of my friends had them; even my parents had them when they were children.

There are several agreement and reference errors. 'Many of my friends' is plural, so the pronoun referring to bikes must be plural: 'them' not 'it'. Similarly, 'my parents' requires 'them'. Also remove the extra 'as' before 'when they were children'. Use a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' linking two independent clauses. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents and avoid redundant words like 'as' before 'when'.