Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid irrelevant words and hesitations. Work on grammar (past tense) and pronouns, and use natural vocabulary (e.g. "bicycle" not "bike" repeatedly). For example, say you didn’t have one, explain the cultural reason briefly, and end with a short consequence or feeling.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bicycle when I was a child. In my hometown people were quite conservative and many families believed that girls shouldn’t ride bicycles, so my parents never allowed it. As a result, I often walked to school instead, which made me wish I could cycle like my friends.

제안: Answer directly, then give a clear reason and a brief prediction using linking words. Reduce hesitations and repeat fewer filler words. Use accurate tenses and clearer phrasing (e.g. "currently" and "in the future"). Provide a specific example or factor that supports your view.

예시: Yes, bicycles and motorbikes are quite popular in my country at the moment because they are affordable and convenient in crowded cities. However, I think their popularity may decline in the future as public transport improves and more people buy cars. For instance, in my city new metro lines are reducing the need for short bike trips.

× No, I don't have any bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'Don't have' is present; 'didn't have' is the correct past negative form. Also use 'a bike' or 'any bikes'—'a bike' is natural here.

× Hyena, uh, hyena.

✓ (Remove this filler; if attempting to say 'I mean', say) I mean,

'Hyena' is irrelevant and appears to be a filler or mistake. Use a clear discourse marker like 'I mean' or remove it to improve coherence.

× I'm in my childhood because in our hometown people are being found conservative and they think women cannot, should have bike.

✓ When I was a child, in our hometown people were considered conservative and they thought women should not have bikes.

The time expression should be past: 'When I was a child'. 'People are being found conservative' is ungrammatical; use 'were considered conservative' (past passive). 'They think women cannot, should have bike' is confused: intended meaning is women should not have bikes—use 'they thought women should not have bikes.' Also use plural 'bikes' for general reference.

× They have a dog and other things.

✓ They had dogs and other animals.

Maintain past tense to match context: 'had' instead of 'have'. Also 'a dog and other things' is vague; 'dogs and other animals' is more natural when speaking generally.

× So when I am.

✓ So I didn't ride a bike when I was growing up.

The original is an incomplete sentence. Provide a complete thought that follows the context: explain consequence in past tense, e.g., 'I didn't ride a bike when I was growing up.'

× Yes, definitely umm in our country if we uh, we see now present bikers so popular, but in the future bike is not that much popular.

✓ Yes, definitely. At present bikers are very popular in our country, but in the future bicycles may not be as popular.

Use present tense 'are' for 'at present'. 'Now present' is redundant; 'at present' or 'currently' is better. 'So popular' can be 'very popular'. For future speculation, use modal 'may' and correct comparison 'not as popular' rather than 'not that much popular'. Use 'bicycles' or 'bikes' consistently.