Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I had a bike as a child.”), then add one or two specific details about why it was important. Use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and use linking words (for example, "because" or "so") to connect ideas. Also correct subject-verb agreement and remove filler words.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was important to my family because my parents were often busy with work, so I used the bike to run small errands and visit relatives. This independence made me feel more responsible.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear reason with specific supporting details. Begin with a direct statement ("Yes, bikes are popular in India."), then explain briefly why (e.g., affordability, traffic, convenience) using linking words like "because" or "therefore." Avoid repetition and factual clutter that doesn't support the point.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in India because they are affordable and convenient for navigating heavy traffic. For example, many commuters choose two-wheelers for short city trips, and students often use bikes to travel to school or college.

× Yes, I have a bike and my bike is a very important for my home because when when my mother and my father has work for for. What they told me that.

✓ Yes, I had a bike and it was very important to my family because when my mother and father had to work, they asked me to look after it.

Issues identified: 5 Past tense issue (the student is talking about childhood so use past tense: 'have' -> 'had'); 22 Article errors / 26 Sentence structure errors ('a very important for my home' is incorrect phrase; use 'very important to my family'); 27 Subject-verb agreement (use 'had' with plural subject 'my mother and father' not 'has'); repetition and filler words removed. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past experiences, match verb forms to plural subjects, and use correct prepositions ('important to' or 'important for' depending on context; 'to my family' is more natural here). Also make sentences concise and avoid repeated words like 'when when' and duplicated 'for'.

× Yes, because where I live uh, that is India, which country name is India and in India there is a lots of population, something around 1.4 billion. That's why here is a bike here, uh, it's a bike is popular.

✓ Yes, I live in India, which has a population of about 1.4 billion. That is why bikes are popular here.

Issues identified: 6 Present tense issue (use present simple 'I live in India' and 'India has'); 1 Singular and plural issue ('a lots of population' incorrect; use 'a large population' or 'a population of about 1.4 billion'); 27 Subject-verb agreement ('India ... has' not 'India ... is'); 26 Sentence structure errors and 22 Article errors ('a bike is popular' awkward; use plural 'bikes are popular here'). Suggestion: State country and population concisely using correct verb 'has', use 'population of' to give numbers, and match singular/plural nouns and verbs (bikes are popular). Remove filler words like 'uh' and repeated phrases.