Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more precise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary (use 'rode', not 'wrote'), limit length (max 5 sentences), and add one specific detail with a linking word. Also avoid fillers and grammatical errors (e.g., 'it was a mini bike' → 'it was a small/pink bike').

예시: Yes, I did. It was a small pink bike that I rode almost every weekend. For example, I often rode it around the park near my house with my friends, which helped me learn balance quickly.

제안: Make your answer more concise and natural: give a direct topic sentence, then add one clear supporting detail using a linking word (e.g., 'for example' or 'especially'). Correct collocations (say 'in the evenings' and 'on weekends').

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, in my neighborhood I often see many children riding their bikes in the evenings and on weekends, because there are safe paths and a small park nearby.

× It was like a mini bike and it was the color pink and I really often wrote it on weekends.

✓ It was like a mini bike and it was pink, and I rode it very often on weekends.

The verb 'wrote' is incorrect in this context; the speaker meant the action of using a bike, which should be 'rode' (past tense of 'ride'). This falls under verb + -ing form category because the error concerns verb choice and form related to actions. Also 'the color pink' is wordy; 'it was pink' is more natural. Suggestion: use the correct past-tense verb for actions with vehicles (ride → rode) and place adverbs ('very often') before the verb or after the verb for natural flow.

× I would really see a lot of children using their bikes often on the evening of weekends or even weekdays.

✓ I often see a lot of children using their bikes in the evenings on weekends and even on weekdays.

The original sentence mixes conditional/modal 'would' with present habitual meaning and has awkward time expressions ('on the evening of weekends'). This is a present tense/habitual action, so use simple present 'see'. Time phrases should be 'in the evenings', 'on weekends', and 'on weekdays'. Suggestion: replace 'would really see' with 'often see' and correct time prepositions to 'in the evenings' and 'on weekends/ weekdays' for natural, grammatical sentences.